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Father's Fading Voice
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Father's Fading Voice |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada 
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This is my expression of the dangers we face of losing loving personal contact with our children because of this globalized technological computerized world. From what it used to be up to the present....??? Father's Fading Voice Wide eyed looking up, papa's voice tingled my spine, fiery dragons roared and wicked witches cackled in Grimm dark scary castles. Fleeing heros cut down beanstalk fee fie foes, jumping jacks and jills on dancing feet played on glossy butterscotch cobblestones. Sunlight circled hills, fishin poles waiting, anxiously I watched a Robin taking breakfast ticking and yanking at a tireless prey, goin fishin I giggled at father's rote verses of two odd fishing partners preparing a feast and unshelling morsels on a sunset washed shore. Weary with happiness...booked into gaurdian inn, with golden weights on my eyelids, my soul's imaginary bedfellows....sharing the last whisper of lips .. a distant past............... ........*~.......... waking to intellectual jellybeans, read only memories of Disney in keystroke kingdom and father's fading voice. I use the father figure only as an example and cause I are one! The role of poetry is to utter the un-utterable; to open up spaces of consciousness and resistance; to language oppressions; to re-language historie [This message has been edited by ethome (07-01-2002 09:59 AM).] |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Eric The images explode and yet touch so tenderly the places where a father's memory lives. Yet, between the lines, I saw the light dim, and the fathers love pull the covers up for the tuck in.  |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
 yeah...I know what you mean...as a mother, it's hardgood write |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Yes with time and tech...some traditions do seem to be lost but not poetry!! And yes you are a father and a POET  love the imagery and analogy in this E-babes. Quite a unique perspective and inspire to write from... waay cool  |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
You did an excellent job of taking us hither and yon... |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
"waking to intellectual jellybeans" I like this. . . and for me, the voices never fade. . . well done my friend. . . ---------------------------------------------------------- To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world. |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
sven chose my favorite line-- *pout* and I like the title--I thought it a great metaphor for losing touch with the sacred. excellent, m'lovely friend! |
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Krissy Senior Member
since 2002-02-22
Posts 556kent England |
Eric hi there, why does mum call you PT, there is a story there I’m sure This is wonderful poetry, the flow and the images speak to me, mum tended to do the stories at home, she was always very good at the special effects. She used to make us really laugh when she read the ugly duckling, This is really well written I love it your writing is very special, mum is ALWAYS right about writers, she has excellent taste. I’m sure you know that she loves your writing, she says you have class, and she is right Have I mentioned that I really do love this poem?   Love and warm stuff As always Krissy And while thy willing soul transpiers |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
Its just too easy to lose touch with your kids...even when you live in the same house...my boys are a little old to read to, but I do play ball with them, and occasionally(when I'm not quick enough  ) they even play catch with me . Did I say, sweet poet man, that you have written yet another wonderful piece?[This message has been edited by Paula Finn (07-01-2002 08:28 PM).] |
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devina Member Elite
since 1999-10-28
Posts 3539Cali |
You've pulled at this mommy's heartstrings with this one!!! We call our lil one jellybean...so I'd have to second that *pout* of the serene one... This was perfect you!!! Open arms can be the most fragile in the world... |
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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (big hugggsssssss) Oh Eric, this is so very sad, sweet friend, it too breaks my heart to see the computer world affect so many relationships and I fear there may be nothing we can do about it! (sad sigh) This is a very good point, sweet friend, my thoughts go out to you, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Eric, thank you for sharing! May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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Suetang Member Ascendant
since 2001-03-07
Posts 5187Melbourne, Australia |
Hello Eric Your caring heart shines through in this piece and your words speak many truths. My father was my guiding light and it was because of my love for him that made me write in the first place. Thank you for stirring my memories. Take care.....Sue Suetang |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
ETHome~ Third read of this for me ! I could see those precious four little sets of eyes, as each of my children, were spellbound by stories they were told and read~ What a special, special treat to read this~ Wonderfully done~ Thanks for stirring my memory-pot~ *Hugs* ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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