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Morning Gathers in the Curtain
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Morning Gathers in the Curtain |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California 
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Morning gathers in the curtain to displays a crimson light dazzled through the slant of shading across a flash of keen insight. Delivered in the softest rustle elfin feet are softly going with the moon's own fingers quieting to the sun’s more open flowing. Now departs delicious sweet dream yet lingers still profound delight lays me down against this lapping quiet water’s weaving light. Pewter tinted stars devoured by the cream that slithers in whispering open up with listening hark the softly growing din. Blaze this tree in sunlit splendor trace the flowering petal near now I feel night’s sweet surrender to the sun shine’s clean and clear. ________ 5-00 |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Martie~ Such beauty fluttering through your curtained verse~ Just so very lovely dear sweet Sis~ Here's that *HUG* Love you~  ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Martie, It doesn't get much better than this. Love it. |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Hi Martie! Just popped in to tell you how beautiful this one is!! ~Hugs~ |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
Ms martie seems a view here that is gentle but has peek-a-boo eyes too enjoyed it babe |
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Rosemary J. Gwaltney Senior Member
since 1999-08-26
Posts 997northern mountains, Idaho |
Delicate loveliness here... I love your play on words "quiet water’s weaving light"! Luscious phrase! I always enjoy your work so much! |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
Much enjoyed. Especially the part about pewter stars and cream. |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Picture Snoopy doing his happy dance...now see my feet fly.... |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
"Blaze this tree in sunlit splendor trace the flowering petal near now I feel night’s sweet surrender to the sun shine’s clean and clear."   (smiles) WOW!!! Oh my gosh, I love how the sun rise and sets in this poem like that dream she feels, sweet friend, this is breathtaking! (kiss on cheek) Your wonderful words always make me smile, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Martie, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
I've been saving this one. I loved the title so much, it's a very tactile image, and the rest just flowed behind, like a drapery in pull. Soft and sensuous. loved it. |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
with the moon's own fingers quieting to the sun's more open flowing. Now departs delicious sweet dream yet lingers still profound delight lays me down against this lapping quiet water's weaving light. Pewter tinted stars devoured by the cream that slithers in whispering open up with listening hark the softly growing din. =========================== gawwwd I love when you rhyme!!!!!  this is pure harmony of imagery and meter and read aloud like the poetic heaven you painted with your words. Now for me some words come easy |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
Martie........I thought my poetry was .... I am wrong... your's is awesome..... Love this one... |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
All I can say is thank you. Well, and fantastic too ~* Sharon *~ |
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CocoBaci Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 3043 |
((( MARTIE ))), oh my goodness this poem is exquisite... Muaah on cheekz DearPoetFriend... *~coco~* |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Pewter tinted stars devoured by the cream that slithers in It simply doesn't get better than this. *S* An inviting title leads to such a delightful read... this is absolutely lovely. |
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snowpants Member Elite
since 2000-09-16
Posts 2061KS |
'Pewter tinted stars devoured by the cream that slithers in whispering open up with listening hark the softly growing din.' I've never quite heard things described in the way that you do, Martie...incredible rhymes and images... sp    I've been down this road forever, |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
you have such a wonderful way with words Martie, just lovely. *s* Like a red brick, |
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ThisDiamond Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353Michigan, USA |
Martie, there is such treasure given to us from your golden mind. I really like this. Great imagery, your trademark. ThisDiamond |
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ShadowRider Senior Member
since 2001-07-14
Posts 1038USA |
As evidenced by the plethora of benevolant replies, you have unearthed a poetic treasure, your mind is the grizzled miner and we are the beneficiaries of your wealth of words. ~high Fives to a cool buddy!~ jeff |
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kayjay Member Elite
since 2002-06-24
Posts 2015Oregon |
Such majestic phrasing!! You are a treat to read. KJ Through rubble and trouble and dark of night |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Indeed you are a treat to read Martie, I can't believe I missed this, I thought I had read all of your amazing poetry. "hugs: Maree  The clouds never expect it when it rains, but the sea, changes colour, but the sea, does not change. |
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