Open Poetry #20 |
What flows through me |
Greeneyes
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
I have come for this-- to say this: but words fail me often, very often-- My thoughts -- After it snowed and the air was crisp you could smell the ozone--a fresh birthing of crystal rain Do not think I can not remember how we danced like thieves-- how the air floated us, without words like-- melting rainbows Two steps of light restless over frozen grass One touch of warmth Between us innocent laughter nights of making love real beneath ballrooms of stars time passes Tonight I have come for this, to say this: I have opened the window I have waited years to feel my thoughts I would rather have one breath of his hair, one kiss of his mouth, one touch of his hand than an eternity without it. [This message has been edited by Greeneyes (05-21-2002 07:55 PM).] |
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NapalmsConstantlyConfused
since 2001-05-15
Posts 529 |
this makes me long for a mug of hot chocolate, lmao. very sensual writing, Lauren. -Dave |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Lauren, May all you utter flower. Enjoyed |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
(smiles) Awwwwww, I love this, sweet friend, may windows of new dreams and hopes always open for you and let in drafts of loves whispers into your heart forever, sweet friend, I just love the way you express and describe emotions! (kiss on cheek) This is wonderful, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Lauren, thank you for sharing! May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
...............you keep leavin' me speechless. She said burn ... together. |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
. . . me too. . . -------------------------------------------------------- To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world. |
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Christopher
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-02
Posts 8296Purgatorial Incarceration |
"...danced/like thieves--" I LOVE this line. And the rest of course... soft, sad. Real. |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Very nice...one of my favorites of you...James |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
Me three!!! Wow, are you ever putting silk on the page with your passion filled pen... |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Excellent writing... |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
Wow. This is so soft and gentle, a Lauren trademark. |
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ctowen Member Elite
since 2001-10-18
Posts 2286Green Mountains of VT |
One truckload of snow on order .... do you have a place to keep it? I may have to deliver it in person ... just keep your window open ... just my thoughts |
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Moonlight Romeo
since 2001-09-10
Posts 982The heart of you |
What flows through you is indeed time and love itself. Thank you. What light through yon window breaks? It is the east, and Juliet is the sun. |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Just a delightful and marvelous write.....wonderful render of emotions.....a superb read! |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
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