Open Poetry #20 |
Emptiness |
Madame Chipmunk Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-05
Posts 8296Michigan |
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ecrivan Member Elite
since 2001-12-10
Posts 3923my own state |
Interesting form and a window on what huricanes and tornados do. Well done! [This message has been edited by ecrivan (04-20-2002 10:13 PM).] |
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skyshine
since 2002-02-07
Posts 3058Beneath the northern stars |
Yes, I agree with ecrivan. Nice graphic to accompany the poem. Good work Lyra, and be well. ~sky I'm in charge, and I say question authority! |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
Lyra, good visual work but it sounds like you are caught up in something bigger than your ability to cope with. I hope all gets better. Keth Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind. Unknown |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
Your poetry is never empty dear Lyra, but I've got to be honest, this on scares me a little bit and makes me worry about you! You ok??? |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
Well,I hope you didn't just have a tornado.(we had an earthquake today!) And that everything else is going ok. Well done write, Lyra Sandra |
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Larry C
since 2001-09-10
Posts 10286United States |
Lyra, Excellent presentation. But I'll pass on the tornado and you should too! As for your life...hopefully all is calm. It's never too late to have a good childhood! Woohoo! |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
Lyra darling girl as always your writing portrays such depth and understanding of the power of nature in our world. This is absolutely a magnificent piece from you, the power and the presence of it are amazing. Truly outstanding writing. The graphic is utterly awesome Take care of you darling heart, Love you xxxxx As always Mushy To give light to them that sit in darkness..... to guide our feet into the way of peace Luke 2:79 |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
(big hugggsssssss) Oh Lyra, I can feel a double-edged sword feeling in this poem, sweet friend, I hope everything is alright and this poem is nothing more than the natural force of weather and its cause and effects! (sigh) My heart goes out to many who are victimized by these natursl disasters, sweet friend, this is powerfully written, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Lyra, thank you for sharing! May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton [This message has been edited by Mistletoe Angel (04-21-2002 01:08 PM).] |
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Chelsea~ Member
since 2001-02-09
Posts 260Ontario, CANADA |
madame chipmunk, Your presentation is very effective, as is the picture, this is great writing. |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
Very well described Lyra.....I rode out Hurricane Hugo in 1989....experienced the emptiness of the eye when it went over us. Very eerie feeling....from 130 miles per hour to zero and back to 130 in about 90 minutes....from two different directions.. Love your description for the tornado...and nice pic... |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Well done Lyra. Very visual description...and rather eerie too, what with living here in tornado alley. Do hope your own life is settling down a bit. ~Love, Hugs, and Prayers, Nancy~ |
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ShadowRider Senior Member
since 2001-07-14
Posts 1038USA |
Lyra, sweet Lady of strength, its OK to be scared. Fear is a dark vacuum, but holding the hand of others, we can join together with a braveness. ~huuuug~ i knew instantly what you were referring to, and those feelings that can chill a soul. a classicaly written poem, where it takes all of the lines to be cohesive as a singular feeling, and done mega-well! jeff |
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Nightshade
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
Yikes!! Hold tight to those ruby slippers!! Well done Lyra. hugs, Chris Life is not measured by breaths you take, but by moments that take your breath away. |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
True story: a few years ago, there was a bad hurricane down south of me, pinpoint Wichita Kansas on a map and go a big East. A friend of ours had taken roses to his wife for their anniversary. He placed the glass vase on the table, plunked the roses in, turned on the news, heard the sirens, grabbed spouse and kids and headed for the basement. When they came back up, the walls of the house were gone. The roses, in the crystal vase on the table, remained untouched. |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
wow..what a picture and also one in my mind from your words..and Sunshine..loved the story *s hugss Lyra keep warm M |
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SmartChick Member Rara Avis
since 2001-09-23
Posts 7081On A Journey To The Unknown |
Hey Lyra, I like this. This is wonderful. |
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Madame Chipmunk Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-05
Posts 8296Michigan |
Thanks Martin, I tried to capture the essence of a tornado with the format of the script also, but I don't think anyone caught that. ~lots of hugs Lyra |
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Madame Chipmunk Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-05
Posts 8296Michigan |
Thanks so much for your reply, Sky ~hugs of appreciation Lyra |
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Madame Chipmunk Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-05
Posts 8296Michigan |
Thanks Keth, I appreciate your reply, but the poem really is about a tornado...there are no hidden emotional innuendos here... ~swirling hugs Lyra |
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Madame Chipmunk Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-05
Posts 8296Michigan |
Thanks Lori, I can't say I'm perfectly okay, I have some really annoying side effects from the radiation treatments...but they are temporary.....I only have 7 more treatments left...but this poem really is about a tornado. Thanks so much for your concern ~loving hugs Lyra |
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Madame Chipmunk Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-05
Posts 8296Michigan |
Thanks Sandra...You must live on the east coast. I hope that you didn't get too much damage from the hurricane. We didn't just have a tornado, but we do have them here quite often. They are truly evil storms ~stormy hugs Lyra |
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Madame Chipmunk Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-05
Posts 8296Michigan |
Thanks Larry...I'll pass on the tornado too....they are frightening. ~scary hugs Lyra |
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Madame Chipmunk Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-05
Posts 8296Michigan |
Thanks so much, Marsha... I love you too! Your pink words are a boost to my self esteem. ~loving hugs Lyra |
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Madame Chipmunk Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-05
Posts 8296Michigan |
Thanks for your reply, dear Noah.... Please don't worry, the poem is really ONLY about a tornado. ~lots of hugs Lyra |
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Madame Chipmunk Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-05
Posts 8296Michigan |
Thanks so very much for your reply, Chelsea ~many hugs Lyra |
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Madame Chipmunk Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-05
Posts 8296Michigan |
Thanks so much, Barry.... That must have been really scary ~many many hugs Lyra |
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Madame Chipmunk Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-05
Posts 8296Michigan |
Thanks so much, Nancy... This is DEFINITELY tornado alley! ~windy hugs Lyra |
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Madame Chipmunk Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-05
Posts 8296Michigan |
Thanks Jeff...but the poem REALLY is only about a tornado...I never even thought about my health as a comparison... I only have 7 more days of this radiation treatment, and then it will take a couple of week for the side effects to go away completely. ~lots of hugs Lyra |
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Madame Chipmunk Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-05
Posts 8296Michigan |
Thanks Chris...Ruby slippers, what a great idea...I think I'll go and buy some...maybe they will keep the tornadoes at bay...... hmmm...maybe I'll buy a dog named Toto also ~ruby slipper hugs Lyra |
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Madame Chipmunk Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-05
Posts 8296Michigan |
Thanks Karilea...that is an amazing story about the crystal vase... It almost sounds like a miracle ~windy hugs Lyra |
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Madame Chipmunk Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-05
Posts 8296Michigan |
Thanks so much, Maureen... Moving here from the east coast, I'd never seen a tornado before... that was 28 yrs ago and I am STILL in awe of their power. ~many warm hugs Lyra |
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Madame Chipmunk Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-05
Posts 8296Michigan |
Thanks Smartchick...I'm glad you enjoyed it. ~many hugs Lyra |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
awesome! |
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