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Through The Window
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Through The Window |
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ThisDiamond Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353Michigan, USA |
Looking in, upon the workings of a lifetime proud In review, of all the talents and the miracles that echo loud Taking stock of every magic moment at its bubbly crest Looking in, the spirit of a lifeline blooms between the pages pressed Seeing far into the past and up ahead this intuition rules Looking in and out without a blink and holding of these treasured tools Seeking all the wonder that of youth might once be missed Seeing and embracing every upward climb and every turn and twist Dreaming still to burst my heart enough to hold another cup In remembering the emptiness a spacious place for filling up Seeing soon how these events have taken hold and shaped the land Looking in, to watch in awe the promises once made by my own hand Copyright Kkh 4/18/02 |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
TD...love it....such a reflective write... |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
ThisDiamond - so many messages here. Excellent write... BC |
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DawnG
since 2000-06-23
Posts 1494United States |
These messages need to resurface.  Dawn |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
I really enjoyed this ThisDiamond. Have you thought of writing a version that doesn't rhyme? The only reason I bring this up is because your words in each line are like a long, flowing line of water, and then they're stopped abruptly by the rock of the rhyme. Rhyming is definitely not a bad thing, but it usually works better when there isn't so many words between the beginning of the line and the end. I' should be used t' enhance the rhythm, no' counteract against it. However, I'm notorious (among myself) for changing my opinions on second and third and fourth, fifth, sixth, seventh, etc. readings. So this one might grow on me like a bed of lichen yet. Really enjoyed. Mike She said burn ... together. |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 BRAVO!!! This is wonderful, sweet friend, yes, yes, promises must always be held above the surface of everything, for they will come true and their fortunes are inevitable! (kiss on cheek) This is wonderful, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Kathleen, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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