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howpeculiar Member
since 2000-12-12
Posts 56 |
sigh, words how alien the precise placement of letters in text or tongue and how they scatter like insects when my brain scrambles to collect them ~ Ah, logic how alien the smooth lines of rails and highways: barriers for people with their feet on the ground and I am less like airplanes, or even clouds than smoke, which follows wind and seeks out lungs a common creature with peculiar nature that can suffocate and kill or die to a dismissive hand ~ Oh, color how alien its richness in oil and subtly in sky; how emotional and ranging to define, I think of magic … In rainbows I wonder if you envision prisms triangular boxes, smooth and exact holding all the black, divine secrets of a pyramid as easy as science, as semantics… if you know that you seem to me as mysterious… clear and perfect cut with razor edge that in light can explode to full spectrum that still, to define I think of magic and I, smoke, testing the edge of you trying to circumscribe these ghostly filaments to sharpness but can only caress. [This message has been edited by howpeculiar (04-17-2002 07:20 PM).] |
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Larry C
since 2001-09-10
Posts 10286United States |
Cool! I like the analogies in this piece.  It's never too late to have a good childhood! Woohoo! |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
In rainbows I wonder if you envision prisms triangular boxes, smooth and exact holding all the black, divine secrets of a pyramid as easy as science, as semantics… if you know that you seem to me as mysterious… clear and perfect cut with razor edge that in light can explode to full spectrum I enjoyed the impact and your explosive expression. Impressive work all the way around!!! |
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ecrivan Member Elite
since 2001-12-10
Posts 3923my own state |
an impressive group of analogies here, good write |
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howpeculiar Member
since 2000-12-12
Posts 56 |
Kudos (and condolences) to anyone who actually read this the whole way through… Thank you for you comments and (shocking) praise. (I can’t believe I posted this thing… I’m so embarrassed  ) |
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Christopher
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-02
Posts 8296Purgatorial Incarceration |
at the least... it's not 'bad'  this was cool: and I, smoke, testing the edge of you and the rest... well, i think you got most of your point across... LOL Pc-n-hgs C msrads...wsitm heh no + |
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howpeculiar Member
since 2000-12-12
Posts 56 |
~smile~ you replied. you know, that's how the whole thing started? That little phrase... then blankness and written/mused: "sigh, words" and internally: "my nemesis..." ...thus became the above. Thank you for your words/thoughts/evilness. Hugs, Charming Incantation NO, all the time. |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Chris picked out my favorite part. And you are so hard on yourself that I wish you'd quit reading ME. (Oh. You DID. heh heh) But I did enjoy, and I don't care if you think me nuts for doing so...so? ppfffft! |
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ThisDiamond Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353Michigan, USA |
A treat from my very first read, and I made several. Interesting style and excellent expression. ThisDiamond |
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Jamie Member Elite
since 2000-06-26
Posts 3168Blue Heaven |
words logic colour light two sides neither wrong neither right muchly enjoyed JThere is society where none intrudes, by the deep sea, and music in its roar. |
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