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Self Critique |
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SiO2 Junior Member
since 2002-06-05
Posts 24New Zealand |
Self Critique Oh! The erudition that echoes in each word, Oh! The depth and wisdom the finest ever heard, Oh! The piquant emotion, my senses do beguile, Oh! The subtle humour, evokes in me a smile. Wow! The magic imagery, you weave in every line, Even the interstices are really quite sublime, The romance that you capture, be still my beating heart! For within each phoneme, you surely weave your art. The cabalistic mysteries implicit in each stroke, Even dark enigmas for cognoscente folk, Nadia of perfection, transcends the universe! Truly poly-dimensional the meaning of your verse. Expedite cathartic rhyme, to cauterise the soul, And triptych rhythms subliminal, as from the tongue it rolls, Oh master we prostrate ourselves, your words inspire love! What a damn shame, this thing here – is none of the above. |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
He he ....a big smile on my face! This is just delightful. I loved every word and line............The title is perfect....... Welcome to Passions! How's things in Kiwi land anyway? |
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SiO2 Junior Member
since 2002-06-05
Posts 24New Zealand |
Very nice thank you, although it’s winter. Thanks very much for the comment and glad you enjoyed it. |
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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
  (sigh) Dang, I was smiling all the way to the end and then it had to end so sadly! (big hugggssssss) May your heart now be fulfilled with all the above and may loves beauty always fill your heart, sweet friend, this is lovely, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Steve, thank you for sharing!  May love and light alwyas shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
HAHAHA...love it...that last line is a killer.. yeah - it really is winter isn't it? Welcome to passions Steve, will be looking for your work..  K |
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ThisDiamond Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353Michigan, USA |
Laughter is the chariot. Actually you are the inspiration. Very well done. ThisDiamond |
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ecrivan Member Elite
since 2001-12-10
Posts 3923my own state |
Your playful rhyme is quite attractive, welcome to Passions and your name the chemical formula for sand?..neat..may your words be as plentiful as the sands of every beach. |
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SiO2 Junior Member
since 2002-06-05
Posts 24New Zealand |
Thank you all for taking the time to read. It wasn’t mean to be sad but humours Mistletoe but thanks for the welcome. Well spotted Ecriven, I used to be a glassblower so… |
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