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Tongues Of Fire
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Tongues Of Fire |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada 
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"wake up baby, c'mon and take a look outside," she said, "there's a full moon shining in the morning light and there's a cool breeze blowing like a piper's pipe and there's tongues of fire chasing the night." there's the smell of fresh coffee floating through the door and I can hear her foosteps on the kitchen floor, the radio clock's playing an old Taylor tune and I'm under a spell between the sun and the moon. Chorus Oh the tongues of fire she brings to me, show me her inward cares and the anxious hopes she needs to seek are dreams we both share and in the heat she's savin me from a heart froze in despair. I was answerin the call on dead boulevard Just a one way lover with ice in my heart but she came along to melt the freeze now a reason for livin is settin me free. Oh ..there's tongues of fire unlocking time there's a voice in my soul calling my mind and there's a breath on my heart like a warm summer breeze and there's tongues of fire glowing in me. : The role of poetry is to utter the un-utterable; to open up |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
ETHome~ Oh my ! I've read you and loved the read ... but this just jumps right to the top of the heap~ VERY NICE~ *Hugs* ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
I loved the title... and knew by the time I'd finished the first verse that the title was only the beginning of the excellence. *S* Great write, ethome! |
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EarthenSoul Member
since 2002-05-30
Posts 163WA, USA |
Absolutely incredible! "Tongues of fire"........ "Under a spell between the sun and the moon".......Great Lines!!!! |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Thanks Marge....I'm so glad you liked! I always appreciate hearing from you!! Suthern....thanks for the kind thoughts I appreciate them so much! Earthernsoul....I like that name! Welcome to Passions I know you'll enjoy your stay! Thanks for the comments they mean so much to me!! |
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Martie
Moderator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Eric You paint the feeling of love with a song...and it aches and breaks and feels so right, in the moring after the darkest night...sorry, got carred away there with my own song. In other words, I loved it! |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Hey flower girl I loved the picture of you and the baby.......nice! Thanks for such kind words they are so pleasing coming from you! |
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Tiersdin Member Elite
since 2000-11-17
Posts 2364east coast |
Nicely done, Eric... ~R.T. "I shall never bond again, as I have bonded with you..." |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
PT darling boy this is absolutely beautiful your writing content and style consistently superb and this is as always absolutely perfect. This is utterly utterly beautiful writing, oh how I miss my soul being washed by your wondrous words of beauty. Am I forgiven my tardy appearance today? Mushy blows a kiss and flutters her eyelashes Thank you darling boy I’ll try to get here earlier tomorrow, I have an excuse I was really busy xxxxx    Love and warm stuff As always Mushy Breathe through the heat of our desire |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Thanks Tiers and Mushy I appreciate the read and comments so much!! |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
  YAY!!! Oh my gosh, I love this, sweet friend, this would make a wonderful hit that is bound to chart the Billboard I'm sure! (big hugggsssssss) Such passion and wonderful rhythm fill your words, sweet friend, may the flame always burn gently in your heart with cheer, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Eric, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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Balladeer
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
a one-way lover with ice in my heart....very cool line, Eric. Strong lyrics here...it would play well, I think  |
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Madame Chipmunk Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-05
Posts 8296Michigan |
Oh ..there's tongues of fire unlocking time there's a voice in my soul calling my mind and there's a breath on my heart like a warm summer breeze and there's tongues of fire glowing in me. Beautifully done, Eric...  ~ hugs of fireLyra |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
I do so like this!!!!!! WOW! Tongues of fire....indeed... |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Thank Noah you're always so kind! Mike...it doesn't sing all that but bad still working on this and I've had it around for a while. Thanks for the comments. Magnus....thanks for the Wow! word I appreciate your comments! |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Lyra it's so nice to hear from you....It makes me happy. Thanks for liking that verse. I appreciate your kind words! |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
old Taylor tune....would that be James Taylor? I can hear a little of him in this if I put the words to the music in my head Great work! |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Like this...James |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Thanks PS and yes, that's who it would be!! James my friend it's always good to hear from you!! Thanks! |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
wow ethome, this would definately be a hit. a frozen heart being thawed....just wonderful. hugs* Like a red brick, |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Hi Gentle S....Thanks so much....Hey I need you for my agent! A hit would be fantabulous! |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
"wake up baby, c'mon and take a look outside," she said, "there's a full moon shining in the morning light and there's a cool breeze blowing like a piper's pipe and there's tongues of fire chasing the night." there's the smell of fresh coffee floating through the door and I can hear her foosteps on the kitchen floor, the radio clock's playing an old Taylor tune and I'm under a spell between the sun and the moon. Chorus Oh the tongues of fire she brings to me, show me her inward cares and the anxious hopes she needs to seek are dreams we both share and in the heat she's savin me from a heart froze in despair. ======================================= YOU ARE SOOOOOOO COOOOL!!! THIS ROCKS!!! "and there's tongues of fire chasing the night." Music man Music Man!!!! The imagery...the metaphor and theme...the melodics...the verbiage and word play...all of it dressed up in your gift of turning verse into lyric...rhyme into Rock and Roll. Eric this is delightful!!!! and very very cool  (but then so is the poet.)  When man is lead to arrogance, poetry reminds him of his limitations |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Janet no wonder you're my poet pet! Thanks again my dear friend! |
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bags123 Member
since 2002-06-06
Posts 128 |
Aw...this is great! I'm forming the melody in my mind. Great way to wake up to a new day. Thanks for making mine. |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Thanks Bags it's good to see you here and thanks for dropping in!! |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
"Oh ..there's tongues of fire unlocking time there's a voice in my soul calling my mind and there's a breath on my heart like a warm summer breeze and there's tongues of fire glowing in me." WOW!!!!! That is an understatement, you are HOT!!!! Into the library this goes. Any time I get a chill, I can re-read this hot little number.  |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
This is great...and gotta love the title...oh ye of tabasco tongue! I think this is one of your best! (but then, I bet ya KNEW the title would appeal to me too!) read this last night, and of course, you probably KNEW I'd be back for more! love to ya, e! |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Thanks Midnite for the great comments you are an Alaskan sweetheart! Hey Celeste, you're the best, thanks for the time you did invest in this my little song of bliss.........Glad you came back! Thank ya all night long and then some! |
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