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Point and Counterpoint
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Point and Counterpoint |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla 
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Results of a bad day at the golf course. Point and Counterpoint Point and counterpoint swings track A razor pendulum turns back A blade with traumas slicing view Cuts my sanity in two A moment dancing whirligig My senses prancing in a jig That strikes my body in smite Flaming red a flying kite Rolls around in scream control Falling through a pain porthole Carried by winged savagery On hells firers imagery A supplement of muses shunt Siphoning the mind to blunt With sound that’s swallowed by the ear Touching fiber ends, of fear. And round the echoes of the muse She dances there in see-through shoes |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
That's QUITE a game, Sy! Must have been a heck of a golf day to bring out these powerful sentiments! Much enjoyed.  Best wishes and hugs, /Kit |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Kit, Good morning dear and how are you today? well I hope? Thank you for the read and I'm now over the feelings.  |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Rolls around in scream control Falling through a pain porthole Carried by winged savagery On hells firers imagery ================================= So...ya let Randy be your caddy again...didnt ya.   quote: *winkiewinkie*  When man is lead to arrogance, poetry reminds him of his limitations When mans concern narrows, poetry reminds him the diversity of existence JFK [This message has been edited by Janet Marie (06-04-2002 08:29 AM).] |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Way cool write Sy! Must have been quite the game!!! ~Morning hugs~ ~Somewhere in my heart I'm always |
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Elan Member
since 2002-05-03
Posts 382State of Wide Eye |
Now dear Seymour, it does sound as if your mind were somewhere else, and not up to par... |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
Seymour darling boy you even manage to convey the feelings of frustration and despair of the game, and do so in a way that showcases your amazing talent so well. You know I adore your writing, and no matter how busy I am I simply have to find time for you. But then you know that, don’t you? I have to have my soul touched by Seymour, or else the day lacks a vital ingredient. A bit like a song, the words are beautiful and can stand alone, but add the melody and the words are transformed, so is a day with my daily does of Seymour. When you are added to the mix of sunlight and shadow then my soul is lifted higher, and my day is blessed with wonder. Anyway this is another utterly utterly perfectly penned poem from you and I absolutely love it. Thank you for my making my day, truly exceptional. As always Mushy   Breathe through the heat of our desire |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Sy Must be why I never played golf...I've seen it take over before...and run with the mood. Great writing! |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
JM, "Golf is a good walk spoiled." He surely got that right. Thank you love. WW Randy Stinky. Enchantress, Morning and hugs back. Elan, Well it cerainly wasn't up to par. LOL Marsha, You certainly have the gift. Thank you dear Martie. |
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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
  (giggles in delight) Oh Seymour, this is sooooo funny and wondeerful, sweet friend, yep, I am not good at golf either and would probably discover some ancient tomb or something being stuck in the sandtrap forever! (smiles) This is delightful, sweet friend, I love it, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Seymour, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Noah, Playing golf I knew you would undrstand. LOL |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
Sy, can see many images in this but she is lovely in her art this distraction that waltzes wearing many names |
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Interloper
since 2000-11-06
Posts 8369Deep in the heart |
I get your point Fool, said my Muse to me, look in thy heart and write. |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
The games people play................I too get your point! |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Dark Stranger To true, thank you. Interloper Than you must get the counterpoint. ethome, Not much a point but thank you. |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
And they have the nerve to call it RELAXATION???? LOL I enjoyed this very much, Seymour. *S* |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Suthern, Well it started out that way. LOL |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
I would not know a birdie from par but I know when I look far a write by Sy is heaven sent no matter what subject's bent... |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
Twas a bogey on the card numbers high, counting hard from a slice instead of hook twas his ball in babbling brook The swing was hard and true as away the little ball flew Through the air so loftily 'pon the green, putting three Knees were knockin, sweaty brow Line it up, figurin' how Stroke the putt, see the hole stoppin' short, one for roll The clubs were tossed in the lake poor Sy is tired, hot to bake A game of golf, so relaxin' tis. until the number so big...it is! Sorry Sy, better luck next time.. |
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Gemini Senior Member
since 1999-12-15
Posts 1203Wisconsin, USA |
Just took some golf lessons and with shoulder aching, I think I am beginning to know exactly what you mean. Excellent write. |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Sunshine, Thank you love, Magnus, Exactly and thank you for the poem and understanding. Gemini, Thank you for the read and reply. |
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