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Good Conscious Morning (By Your Side)
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Good Conscious Morning (By Your Side) |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada 
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Across the lake where the trees meet the sky Comes the sunrise to fill my waking eyes. In the old pine beside the creaking dock songbirds unwind thier feathered clocks Into this silent moment tranquil filled a murmmured whisper breaks the still. I turn and smile at your quivering face as your dream comrades fade away Your eyes open to my connection your smile speaks recognition. Then, right then, between the light crowsfeet where your sunlit emeralds shine to greet the open passage from this heart of mine I crave your consciousness by my side. The role of poetry is to utter the un-utterable; to open up |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Oh! Oh! I was going to pick a line, then another, then another, then the whole poem just wouldn't let go! Do I like this? NO! I love it! |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
...WONDERFUL!!... ~Somewhere in my heart I'm always |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Ethome, Delicious, delicious.  |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Eric You can make it happen! I loved this! |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Karilea...thanks for giving me an "I love it!" Glad you did. Enchantress I thnk you so much for that word! Thank you Seymour so happy you dropped in! Martie I appreciate your kind words so much! |
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Saunni Senior Member
since 2000-07-11
Posts 1777West Virginia |
Ethome, this is just an awesome write here! I love this!  Sauni:)The Only Time I See The Sun Is When I'm Within That Vanilla Breeze.The Only Time I'm One With The Sun Is When He Shelters Me From The Rain. L.S |
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Saunni Senior Member
since 2000-07-11
Posts 1777West Virginia |
BTW, cool title as well Sauni:)The Only Time I See The Sun Is When I'm Within That Vanilla Breeze.The Only Time I'm One With The Sun Is When He Shelters Me From The Rain. L.S |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Thank you Saunni twice even! I'm glad you enjoyed it!! |
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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
(smiles) Awwwwwwww, this is soooooo gorgeous, sweet friend, I too couldn't pick a favorite line, every one of them are wonderful! (cheers in delight) YAY!!! Your gorgeous words of love always make me smile, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Eric, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
Very beautiful thoughts. What a contented picture this gives. Sandra |
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Madame Chipmunk Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-05
Posts 8296Michigan |
In the old pine beside the creaking dock songbirds unwind thier feathered clocks Into this silent moment tranquil filled a murmmured whisper breaks the still. This is beautiful poetry, Eric...I wish I were in your poem right now.  ~ hugs for brightening my dayLyra |
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ThisDiamond Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353Michigan, USA |
Well done! The last line was beautifully set. ThisDiamond |
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ecrivan Member Elite
since 2001-12-10
Posts 3923my own state |
inspiring write..nature has its ways to instill its reason...thanks for sharing [This message has been edited by ecrivan (06-03-2002 12:21 AM).] |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
Thank you for this morning treat...even though it's early evening here (real time 8:30PM), I can come back and read it again, any time I want, since it's in my library now.  |
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snowpants Member Elite
since 2000-09-16
Posts 2061KS |
'Your eyes open to my connection your smile speaks recognition. Then, right then, between the light crowsfeet where your sunlit emeralds shine to greet the open passage from this heart of mine I crave your consciousness by my side.' If you didn't already know, these lines are awesome...the rhyme and cadence of your writes are spectacular...I love this! sp    I've been down this road forever, |
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NewEnglandlazurlu Member Rara Avis
since 2002-01-04
Posts 7470A Mountain Paradise |
Oh Eric this is just magnificent. Each line is totally delicious but these are my favorite: '...Across the lake where the trees meet the sky Comes the sunrise to fill my waking eyes. In the old pine beside the creaking dock songbirds unwind thier feathered clocks...' Gosh, I am so calmed by your words. Hugs, Marti " My wrinkles are badges of courage and reveal that I am a Mother." |
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Interloper
since 2000-11-06
Posts 8369Deep in the heart |
"I crave your consciousness by my side" ~~~~~~~~~~~~` My favorite line, Eric. Of course, I loved the whole thing Fool, said my Muse to me, look in thy heart and write. |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Thank you Noah......Those are nice thoughts.....but your thoughts generally are very nice! Sandra....great to hear it made you feel contented....everytime that happens to me that's the way I feel. Well MC we'll just have to move over and get you in this poem...I think there's enough room! Thanks for the comments! Thanks ThisDiamond I appreciate the kind words! Thank-you ecrivan, yes, nature does! Kacy...Glad you dropped in regardless of the time....come back anytime...thanks so much! Snowpants Your comments are so fulfilling and I thank you from the bottom of my heart! Marti ......I truly thank you so much for the kind words! Come back again please! Interloper...I'm glad you could drop in and have a read....thanks! |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Very fine...James |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Hi James.....Thanks I appreciate that! |
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