Open Poetry #20 |
No Fear........ |
Balladeer
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I tried hard to make her fear me Shouted warnings loud and clear To be certain she could hear me Every time that she came near. Then I tried to make her tremble With profound anxiety So her mind would disassemble Anythoughts of loving me. She just smiled at my chest-beating Silenced protest with her hand, Kissed my cheek and kept repeating “There’s no need…. I understand.” Now I’m lost within the splendor That surrounds me everywhere As I let my heart surrender To the girl I couldn’t scare. |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
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doreen peri Member Elite
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
’Deer dearest heart this is utterly amazingly well written, you know for certain that I absolutely adore this. No one paints word pictures with your consummate skill, nobody does it like you. I love the way you layer the scene, build it into a masterpiece, truly exquisite darling boy. You know I’m going to say I love this utterly don’t you? And of course you know I’m smiling brightly Love and warm stuff As always Mushy Breathe through the heat of our desire |
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Madame Chipmunk Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-05
Posts 8296Michigan |
Great job, Michael....I hope its true ~cheering you on, hugs Lyra |
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MIdsummerRain Member
since 2002-05-19
Posts 175St. Louis, Missouri |
"...As I let my heart surrender To the girl I couldn’t scare..." Beautiful & Compelling; I found a sense of humor in this, which enabled me to see it for what it was...A masterpiece in the shortest terms, & most convenient definitions! ~Rayne For in much wisdom is much grief |
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Larry C
since 2001-09-10
Posts 10286United States |
That act ain't bullet proof! I knew it... |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
So the Gorilla act just didn't work, hey? Well, they always say, try, try again... Probably one of the SHORTEST poems we've seen from you... |
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my3monkeytoes Member
since 2002-05-11
Posts 152In the Carolina Breeze |
Very Sweet, Balladeer! |
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Kit McCallum
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since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
When a heart is warm and caring, It cannot be hidden 'Deer, Yours was never meant for scaring, For, my friend, it's too sincere. This was beautiful Michael. It's nice to know that sometimes people do see through to the heart and take a chance. This left me with a big much enjoyed sweet poet. Best wishes and hugs /Kit |
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Toerag Member Ascendant
since 1999-07-29
Posts 5622Ala bam a |
Why? why?, you described me to a tee?....LOL |
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Elan Member
since 2002-05-03
Posts 382State of Wide Eye |
Somehow, 'Deer Sir, it sounds as if you are both the fortunate ones... |
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Joe Lamando Member
since 2001-11-20
Posts 124Massachusetts,USA |
What a wonderful poem! Happy endings, I love! Joe Lamando |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
(smiles) Awwwwwww, this is sooooo sweet, sweet friend, I too believe this is the shortest poem I've ever read from you but its soooooo gorgeous and sprouting with joy! (sigh) This is lovely, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Balladeer, thank you for sharing! May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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Martie
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since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Michael Awwww, this gave my heart a smile. Such tenderness doesn't need many words..to let us see. Hugs! |
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Interloper
since 2000-11-06
Posts 8369Deep in the heart |
Awww. We all know you are just one GR8 big softy Fool, said my Muse to me, look in thy heart and write. |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
Happily ever after??? Hope so. Sandra |
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Saunni Senior Member
since 2000-07-11
Posts 1777West Virginia |
This is truly awesome!! Goodness, I love it! Sauni:)The Only Time I See The Sun Is When I'm Within That Vanilla Breeze.The Only Time I'm One With The Sun Is When He Shelters Me From The Rain. L.S |
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SmartChick Member Rara Avis
since 2001-09-23
Posts 7081On A Journey To The Unknown |
Awwww Balladeer! You have a very kind and tender heart. |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
ya ain't scared me none neither toughguy! [This message has been edited by passing shadows (06-04-2002 12:20 PM).] |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Mike, I'll bet you say that to all the girls. |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
MIchael Well written in such a few verses.........you were just hiding behind you that's all and well, you lost/won! |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Michael, is that you?! Why you ole sweetie! Wearing your heart on your sleeve now I see! ~Hugs~ ~Somewhere in my heart I'm always |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Yammean those of us who don't skeer off win the prize??? *big grin* You may have just caused Toe more trouble than you could ever have dreamed! LOL This is great, Deer One... I enjoyed! *S* |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
I love it!!!! |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
She's one smart girl, Dear one! Cor |
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Balladeer
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since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
serenity... Doreen... mushy..thank you! I love to layer scenes!! Madame C...could be verse! Rayne..thank you for such a beautiful reply.. Larry C...LOL! Believe everything you read, do ya? Sunshine...I have my short moments!! my3monkeytoes..thanks for coming by!! Kit...thank you, miss. I saw through to yours and the view was breathtaking!! Toerag...MY GOD! You may be right!!!! Elan...couldn't agree more...I thank you. Joe Lamando...so do I! Thank you, sir.. Noah...ypur reply was longer than my poem....and I thank you for it! Martie..you always know the right thing to say.... Interloper...that's what SHE said! Sandra...somethings come with no guarantees, right? Saunni..thank you for letting it touch you.. smartchick....SHHHH! It;s a secret! Dixie..you are not the type to be scared, I know... Sy....only the ones that stop long enough to listen! ethome...you hiding behind you...I LIKE that! Enchantress...LOL! Check the archives. I've done a lot of it!!! Suthern girl...if this causes Toe problems it has officially become my favorite poem!!! hoot Owl...thank you! How are you doing??? Corinne..I've learned that ALL girls are smart...and most of them too smart for me!! |
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Charisma
since 2000-09-30
Posts 5906lost in blue pages |
awwwww as always a beauty, showing kindly one wonderful poet love it Charisma |
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Titia Geertman Member Ascendant
since 2001-05-07
Posts 5182Netherlands |
Ahhhh but...with those grinning eyes and big smile you may try to put up an act sweetie, but actually you couldn't scare a mouse my dear Titia A rose is a rose is a rose...I guess... |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
She sure called your bluff, didn't she? |
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Krissy Senior Member
since 2002-02-22
Posts 556kent England |
’Deer Hi there yet again your writing fills me with awe, it’s incredibly well written and so picturesque. You certainly have an incredible talent for sprinkling these blue pages with diamonds and star-studded delights. You see I’m spending way too much time with my mother I’m beginning to sound like her now, this really is something special and I love it too. Love and warm stuff As always Krissy And while thy willing soul transpiers |
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