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Gift of Hand, revised
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Gift of Hand, revised |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart 
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Palm up, take my hand for this promise of dreams grand entwine then our hands and if you were to believe in me, what treasures will we uncover… like Adam and Eve anew to sense of love’s first kiss would we know then Eden’s bliss… all gifts I would grant to you for I see pleasure in your smile, I see walks of many miles, I see fantasy in the gifts I give to thee bless me by your smile, take me in your embrace, grant me a kiss of you, from your princely face thus is your gift you give to me strength in tender, love’s command merciful, love’s touch chide me not for these my dreams but carry me forth on tides of beam, bear me up to bluest cloud, transport me to land of proud for you would have my all of me, this I give you, most graciously, cans’t thou see this truth of me in these thy words of love Ah my dear, dear heart, come and take my hand, ‘tis reaching for you, cross this chasm wide nay I cannot hide these smiling lips nor not feel thee with these fingertips when for a promise of dream, grand love, forever, stands 29 December 00 Revised ©Karilea Rilling Jungel 3 June 2002 |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
OK! I'm convinced!! I will! I will!! er, I mean, nice poem, Sunshine  |
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Duncan Member Ascendant
since 2001-08-07
Posts 5455 |
and if you were to believe in me, what treasures will we uncover… like Adam and Eve anew to sense of love’s first kiss would we know then Eden’s bliss… Well now, 'damn' just doesn't seem like enough to say. Sure found this perfect tonight. Don't ya love it when that happens? I'm falling even more in love with you |
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SmartChick Member Rara Avis
since 2001-09-23
Posts 7081On A Journey To The Unknown |
Very nice poem, Sunshine! |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
Kari darling heart sister I’m almost speechless with utter awe you have no idea how this spoke to my soul. THIS is exceptional, your writing is always superb but this is something truly awesome. While I’m waiting to get my breath back I’ll send you a dazzling smile and just so you know I utterly utterly love this this I give you, most graciously, cans’t thou see this truth of me in these thy words of love Ah my dear, dear heart, come and take my hand, ‘tis reaching for you, cross this chasm wide nay I cannot hide these smiling lips nor not feel thee with these fingertips The whole poem is incredible in it’s perfect construction form and language usage, but these particular lines make my soul weep for joy, they are gorgeous. IWIHWT and how much I know that I never could, you are truly the mistress of this style of wonder, thank you for writing this. It’s utterly utterly perfect You do know I love this don’t you? I thought you probably did.   Love and warm stuff As always Mushy  Breathe through the heat of our desire |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
sunshine this work is lovely romantica guess it is what we all dream of enjoyed it much |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
"nay I cannot hide these smiling lips nor not feel thee with these fingertips" Just lovely Karilea! I especially love the line I quoted above ...  Sigh .... Wonderful flow and sentiments, much enjoyed! Best wishes, /Kit |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Ooooh Karilea... What a wonderful piece to wake up to today! This is magnificent...a keeper...! I feel as though I would like to pick it up and give it a hug. I know you understand what I'm trying to say. Dang this is SO good!! ~Hugs YOU~ ~Somewhere in my heart I'm always |
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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (smiles) Awwwwwww, this is soooooo beautiful, sweet friend, I just love the gorgeous words of love you write, I long to feel the hand of the girl I love so so much so I can feel this magic you weave so well! (sigh) This is wonderful, sweet friend, I love it, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Karilea, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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Interloper
since 2000-11-06
Posts 8369Deep in the heart |
W8! Don't choose Michael, yet. I have a proposition This is absolutely gong into my library right now! Truly one of your better works Fool, said my Muse to me, look in thy heart and write. |
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Saunni Senior Member
since 2000-07-11
Posts 1777West Virginia |
Sunshine, this is amazingly wonderful! Great write! Love it! Sauni:)The Only Time I See The Sun Is When I'm Within That Vanilla Breeze.The Only Time I'm One With The Sun Is When He Shelters Me From The Rain. L.S |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
"for you would have my all of me, this I give you, most graciously, cans’t thou see this truth of me in these thy words of love Ah my dear, dear heart, come and take my hand, ‘tis reaching for you, cross this chasm wide nay I cannot hide these smiling lips nor not feel thee with these fingertips when palm up, take mine hand for a promise of dream, grand love, forever, stands" Wow what a romantic spiritual gem this is! |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
Now you got me started.... Beautiful poem...YEP! It surely is.... This gift of hand, a treasure’s touch Soft tendrils sleek, once taking such To hold once light, to leave a kiss to grasp at night, in mome’ of bliss From one a spark, electric fire to one to feel, flame of desire In reach of tips so warm, so soft This gift of hand from lover’s loft |
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ShadowRider Senior Member
since 2001-07-14
Posts 1038USA |
palms down so i offer a gift of friendship with palms up spiritually perfect, Sunshine. the verse breaks added something...nodding *smiles* jeff |
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Madame Chipmunk Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-05
Posts 8296Michigan |
chide me not for these my dreams but carry me forth on tides of beam, bear me up to bluest cloud, transport me to land of proud beautiful writing, Karilea... ~ loving hugsLyra |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
for you would have my all of me, this I give you, most graciously, I read this yesterday, but was hurried... so I came back to savor it today. *S* This is beautiful and tender, Sunshine... so very lovely. |
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Charisma
since 2000-09-30
Posts 5906lost in blue pages |
oh WOW this is stunning Karilea...one for my library for sure. Glad I was able to read this beauty, thank you for sharing. ((hugs)) Charisma |
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Charisma
since 2000-09-30
Posts 5906lost in blue pages |
oooops forgot the thread... |
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