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Life After Beth
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Life After Beth |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada 
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Inside the oceans of sweet dreams there's places you can't run nor walk and you get caught up in a stream on a slumber boat of scattered thoughts You see a face there you adore and she offers you her breast you reach for her but she's no more oh she looked so much like Beth I live with memories locked in mind since I laid her soul to rest. and my heart aches for a time, a time, for life after Beth. The search for inner peace of mind on the narrow trail to light comes with a rough and rocky climb through passages of love and strife. You find a goal to set you free to share until the shades of death and you give your soul to your needs but you give your heart to Beth I live with memories locked in mind since I laid her soul to rest. and my heart aches for a time, a time, for life after Beth. This is strictly ficticious! The role of poetry is to utter the un-utterable; to open up spaces of consciousness and resistance; to language oppressions; to re-language historie [This message has been edited by ethome (06-01-2002 07:27 PM).] |
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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (big hugggsssssss) Oh Eric, I am so glad this is only fictitious, this is beautiful but so very sad too and filled with yearning, sweet friend, I think some can relate to the torment of such remembrance like this sometimes and my heart goes out to them all! (sigh) This is powerful, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Eric, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Eric, this piece absolutely aches. It is sad that such beautifully expressed poetry must come from such a loss. ~Heartfelt Hugs~ ~Somewhere in my heart I'm always |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Thanks Noah you always give the writer such a good shot in the ego.....You're a very nice young man! Have a nice day! |
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Martie
Moderator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Eric Glad that this is ficticious, for the feeling is certainly real. As always, you write with heart. |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Martie and enchantress you snuck in on me and I'm glad you did...Thanks for the lovely comments............Love ya both! |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Ah Eric, you must have added the fact that this is fictitious while I was posting my comment. This is the sign, to me anyway, of a very creative writer... one who can indeed use words so profound, and in such a way, as to make the reader actually believe what is written, to be true! Once again...Wonderful!!  ~Somewhere in my heart I'm always |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Thanks Enchantress those are nice thoughts coming from such a fine poet as yourself! |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
PT darling boy you hold souls lilting song in your words, this is a powerful emotive piece of writing, truly outstanding. Do I love this? Tell me what do you think? I love it its Absolutely Perfection personified. Where would souls go if it wasn't ’or your voice reaching out to speak for them. YOU are the light that leads them back home darling heart. There are those out there who will relate to this, they will nod their heads in agreement and say yes oh yes. As always darling your writing is exceptionally good. And as I always say it always was, and always will be, you are a very very superior writer and I love this utterly   Love and warm stuff As always Mushy  Breathe through the heat of our desire Thy coolness and they balm Let sense be dumb let flesh retire Speak through the eathquake wind and fire Oh [This message has been edited by Marsha (06-01-2002 08:21 PM).] |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Thanks Mushy you're too kind...I appreciate your thoughts! |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
How do you do this? Over and over again, with different themes, you write words that breathe. Well done! |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Thanks Midnite you're so very kind! |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
There is life after Beth...it takes a while to find it...James |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Encouraging advice for all James and I thank you! |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
Fick, smick titious... I do believe that which ever it may be.... You have done well. Love the flow of the poem...And I am a sucker for poems like this... Thanx.. |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Magnus my friend you write them so very well yourself.....that much I truly know....and thanks!! |
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Saunni Senior Member
since 2000-07-11
Posts 1777West Virginia |
Oh, Eric, my heart goes out to you, and, I swear, I know this feeling so well. It seems like it's so hard to "live" like you did and hard to find out how you did before. She is with you always, I just hope that helps you, because she really is! And, smiling all the way. Life after Beth will come again when you least expect it to. It's a promise. Great write, just wish you didn't hurt so much. Sauni:)The Only Time I See The Sun Is When I'm Within That Vanilla Breeze.The Only Time I'm One With The Sun Is When He Shelters Me From The Rain. L.S |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Thank you Saunni....you're so sweet! |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
Wow, this is amazingly heart touching especially if ficticious. Well done. Sandra |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
ETHome~ As longingly lovely as if you'd lived it~ I don't think any poetic thought is 'fictious' ... just meant to spring from someone else's inkwell~  *Hugs* ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Ethome...are you sure this is just fictitious...? It reads so very, very real... |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Catalinamoon thank you for the fine thoughts! Marge....I guess you're right....poets pick up pieces of everyone's life as they go along and they seem to live to write about them! Thank Marge. Hey Sunshine ...yeah it's me Mr unreal....thanks for the comments! |
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