Open Poetry #20 |
She Looked At You |
Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
She Looked At You She stood quite quiet, she emoted cool Just one look at her, yes, nobody's fool; Her temper soothing, her demeanor so calm She was restful to see, no uttered qualm… But when she looked at you… First, you're taken in by her eyes of green Fine lined wrinkles of smiles often seen Straight-away she gazes at you so steadily Right back into your eyes, as your soul she sees… Next, her body is perfect, for a woman her age, You can see she's been hugged, perhaps walked a stage; No airs nor swagger, nor feminine wiles She's solid, not stolid, she'll go many more miles. But when she looked at you… There was something about her, it was in the air Not a forbidden scent no, something beyond compare, Ah, something about her, yes, you may think… It was when she captured your soul, with her quiet wink. She stood there poised, but just on the brink She watched your face, she knows what you think; Quiet contemplation, with face quiet, serene, But her wink brought to mind, a laughing queen. So when she looked at you… She made you quite pleased to be in the same room you caught yourself without your present gloom, She lit up your life, more than you liked to think From all that she gave you, one quick little wink. ~*~ 22 November, 1999 revised, 31 May 2002 |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
I like this so much, nicely organized,and has such a happy, hopeful feelng to it. I think the revision is great.(though I missed the original) Sandra |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
(smiles) Awwwwwwww, I love this, sweet friend, it always makes me smile too just thinking of how something so simple can make ones day whenever! (sigh) Smiles are contagious, sweet friend, they shine in you all the time, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Karilea, thank you for sharing! May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
How did you know that's how I felt when she looked at me? Have you been reading my memoirs? I've felt many of those feelings you describe here. Brings the school boy right out sometimes. You girls are good at that and I love it! Super write Karilea looking at it from your perspective...nice angle! |
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Martie
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since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Karilea Sounds like someone I know...maybe with a bit of sun shining on her. Liked this painting of such a lovely lady! |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
I too think this woman....with the cute little wink.... May have a bit of a SUN tan.... This is good...like it...amazing what a little wink can do.. |
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ThUnDeRkYsS Senior Member
since 1999-09-23
Posts 727Wisconsin |
Where is this woman? Tell me what room she is standing in so I can get in line for this!! I felt a little "taken" just reading it. Wonderful Strive for higher levels, if they seem out of reach... Grow, and they will get closer. |
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