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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738
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My mercury is not like yours my yearning's there atop my skin-- I taste the bite of fruit of sin just waiting for a breeze... My hunger is a craving, young a contest waiting for a name something wild on tottered edge a game in search of rules of ease.... My yearn is deeper than my lung-- I'm fathomless in desperate lunge. compounding self within Her tide aware the ocean's bubble rise dreamland death in yearn of light explosion of a heart in burst my need is deeper than my thirst-- my thirst throws sand upon my lies... My tongue is but a taste grown old... remains of me, unquenchable my toes are jingle-jangle bells-- my eyelids are the gates to hell-- never never never closed. [This message has been edited by serenity (05-31-2002 04:58 AM).] |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
Serenity darling girl this is awesome, truly exceptional writing. You again have excelled darling girl, you really are a master at this, capturing the words and pinning them to the page. Absolutely first class, you really are a very very fine writer. As I’ve mentioned once of maybe twice. And this with its perfect and exquisite language usage is simply stunning. Utterly utterly excellent writing and of course I love it utterly utterly  Love and warm stuff As always Mushy   Breathe through the heat of our desire |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
You are one wild and wonderful southern belle of poetry. This has got a passionate whack to it that just knocks the reader right between the sinful eyes! I love it when volatile emotions run open and free like this! "My mercury is not like yours my yearning's there atop my skin-- I taste the bite of fruit of sin just waiting for a breeze... My hunger is a craving, young a contest waiting for a name something wild on tottered edge a game in search of rules of ease...." You're so good bad! |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Serenity, my need is deeper than my thirst-- It doesn't get much better than that.  |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
yeah yeah that is what they all say (grin) enjoyed you here ms |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
My mercury is not like yours my yearning's there atop my skin-- I taste the bite of fruit of sin just waiting for a breeze... My hunger is a craving, young a contest waiting for a name something wild on tottered edge a game in search of rules of ease.... My yearn is deeper than my lung-- I'm fathomless in desperate lunge. ============================== oh damn.................. gawwwwd i love the way you rhyme this is.......... this..... damn....just damn....  Cant stand up for fallin apart |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
Whew, just took me right with you through this whole poem Very amazing, K. Sandra |
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Interloper
since 2000-11-06
Posts 8369Deep in the heart |
My eyes just flowed to the bottom ... effortlessly  |
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