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Duncan Member Ascendant
since 2001-08-07
Posts 5455 |
if the flame was bright enough blue enough circled in familiar mystery would you singe and binge crash and burn for that one moment would you live on it then a lifetime no regret, no anger though the loneliness consumes the very dust of wing would you walk away from day to day walk toward dreams and such would you have the strength you hope for me and the love would you Desperate for changing |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
The proverbial moth always shows up, doesn't it? But it has to be the right flame or light. Keep the candles burning, and the porch light on...and hope the beautiful butterfly ventures within your welcoming light again.  |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Very well expressed yearning plea in this. Enjoyable read! |
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Ivy Rose Senior Member
since 2001-12-29
Posts 1300MA, USA |
Duncan...WONDERFUL WRITING!!!! Love the way this floats down the page and into the heart. ***Ivy Rose |
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jamesjiao Member
since 2000-04-12
Posts 268Backwaters of Avalon |
Pure and flowing. Proverbs never die out  . I hope your flame lights up everybody's heart!- James |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
This is good, Duncan. I don't know what the answer is, though to me, it is well worth the pain to go for it, whenever possible. Sandra |
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Tracey Member Elite
since 2001-08-29
Posts 2808where insanity meets breeding |
would you walk away from day to day walk toward dreams and such I think everyone should walk towards their dreams (or run…just so long as you don’t trip!! Lol). Dreams make life worth living, and we should take the chance to follow our dreams whenever humanly possible. Just finding that out myself.  Everything is possible in the game of life (Simple Minds-Promised You a Miracle) [This message has been edited by Tracey (05-30-2002 07:33 AM).] |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
would you singe and binge crash and burn for that one moment would you live on it then a lifetime no regret, no anger though the loneliness consumes the very dust of wing would you walk away from day to day ============================= would you have the strength you hope for me and the love would you =================================== *sigh* .... you really dont play fair... the moth mascara is singe proof...not tear. you do know how much I love this, right? and how much I felt it...(yes you know) so many lines here went thru me...and reminded me of things I've lost sight of lately... thank you for that D ... you penned a moth anthem my porch pal because you understand. TY would you for that one moment would you live on it then a lifetime no regret, no anger moth reply-- die trying baby...die trying  love your new sig....perfect!! |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Dang!! ~Somewhere in my heart I'm always |
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Neala Member
since 1999-08-21
Posts 262Florida, USA |
Wow! ::claps:: |
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Startime Member Ascendant
since 2000-10-03
Posts 5918Canada |
*sigh* how very wonderful....many questions....the answer would have to be that love would have the strength to do what is right for the one they love....hugs...so well done...  Love I leave with you whether it is in your life now or yet the essense of your dreams. |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Cheap Trick The Flame Another night slowly closes in, And I feel so lonely. Touching heat freezing on my skin, I pretend you still hold me. I'm going crazy, I'm losing sleep. I'm in too far, I'm in way too deep over you. I can't believe you're gone. You were the first, you'll be the last.  *library* |
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Interloper
since 2000-11-06
Posts 8369Deep in the heart |
A well posed question in a well crafted work. I enjoyed it very much Fool, said my Muse to me, look in thy heart and write. |
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esclandre Member
since 2001-06-11
Posts 62Northern California |
well I would. this is a cool poem. the style reminds me of someone... esclandre Je le Rêve, je Pleure |
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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (big hugggsssssss) Yes, always keep those candles burning bright, sweet friend, hope is here for us all and you will find this comfort too! (smiles) I love this, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Duncan, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
I just had to read this again. And say, yes, I would and did, but it got me nowhere. I do love this write, Duncan. Sandra |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
Is there a time limit on this question, or is it timeless? I have been given a limited amount of time on this planet. Sorry to seem so impatient. But time is of the essence. |
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ThUnDeRkYsS Senior Member
since 1999-09-23
Posts 727Wisconsin |
Yes, I would make that mistake again I think...  LOL But you never know unless you try, you could spend a lifetime running from what could've been the best thing that ever happened to you if you dont at least try.Strive for higher levels, if they seem out of reach... Grow, and they will get closer. [This message has been edited by ThUnDeRkYsS (05-31-2002 10:20 PM).] |
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Titia Geertman Member Ascendant
since 2001-05-07
Posts 5182Netherlands |
How come I have to read your poems over and over????? BECAUSE THEY ARE SO BEAUTIFUL!!!!! if you were my age, I'd sit on any flame you was lightening Titia A rose is a rose is a rose...I guess... |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
Interesting thoughts Duncan...I like this muchly..  K |
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Christopher
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-02
Posts 8296Purgatorial Incarceration |
i would, but you're just not my type... this is what matters, the reflections and the questionings. keep going, keep going. |
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Tiersdin Member Elite
since 2000-11-17
Posts 2364east coast |
I love this Duncan, warm & tender as one would expect from you... ~R.T. "I shall never bond again, as I have bonded with you..." |
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baerlon Member
since 2000-01-14
Posts 197Youngstown and East Liverpool, Ohio, USA |
Thx for posting this, i found it enjoyable. There's a peace inside us all |
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Martie
Moderator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Duncan You ask a question with a piece of art, how could I say no? |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
Been there done that and he didn't! I don't ask anymore! But the question remains the same! I hope the answer is everything you want to hear, for you have posed the question so sincerely, and that to me is the keyword! Romance is an after thought when it comes to loving your very best....and this was all that...and more!!! |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
for that one moment would you live on it then a lifetime no regret, no anger though the loneliness consumes the very dust of wing ======================== needed to read this one again......... TY When man is lead to arrogance, poetry reminds him of his limitations |
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Madame Chipmunk Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-05
Posts 8296Michigan |
I don't know how I missed this one, Duncan... it is quite simply beautiful ~ lots of hugsLyra |
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snowpants Member Elite
since 2000-09-16
Posts 2061KS |
'if the flame was bright enough blue enough circled in familiar mystery would you singe and binge crash and burn' This is excellent, Duncan...these lines gave me the chills...the style adds such intensity...great write... sp   I've been down this road forever, |
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icequeen Senior Member
since 2001-12-09
Posts 633FL USA |
I would love to hear this put to music. It's really fantastic... may I keep a copy? I'm much impressed with this writing It is excellent. ...and her crown was formed by the ice in her eyes |
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