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Open Poetry #20

attempt at the ineffable

GOlDsparklESS
Member

since 2001-12-13

Posts 428
central nj

0 posted 2002-05-29 11:04 PM

glaring observations
this carousel is twirling
in my knowing
unleashed
explanations remain unfathomable

my delightful burden
illusion of choice vanquishes
to frail illusions chosen

i saw the truth inside
i cry out from the prismatic beauty of all
superlative shivers of exaltation..

realizing the facets
of its
not
over

Midnitesun

Member Empyrean

since 2001-05-18

Posts 28647
Gaia

1 posted 2002-05-29 11:52 PM

"i saw the truth inside
i cry out from the prismatic beauty of all
superlative shivers of exaltation.."
Very nice imagery.

angelswing
Senior Member

since 2000-02-10

Posts 705
United Kingdom

2 posted 2002-05-30 09:08 AM

'my delightful burden
illusion of choice vanquishes
to frail illusions chosen'
- Brilliant lines, so clever and subtle . I loved it; I've been away from the site for a while, but I see the standard of the young writers here is still amazing .
Keep with the meaningful style of writing; truly beautiful .
L.of.L. Tom.
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'There is only a very thin line between genius and insanity, this is measured only on sucess; I am proud to be considered an under-achieving genius'.

ethome
Member Patricius

since 2000-05-14

Posts 11858
New Brunswick Canada

3 posted 2002-05-30 09:11 AM

Some excellent expression in this...well done!

EagleScorpion
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since 2000-03-08

Posts 1644
Here, Now, Forever

4 posted 2002-05-31 02:15 AM

its not over. its never over, manisha

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