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Silent Sounds |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart 
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Silent Sounds Soulfully she calls out to him, hear me Like a spirit on the wind, nay Circe Come hear the call, come, this the force compels Nature is driven, thus this command swells Hear me, on ghost winds her words to him fly Hear me, his head tilts at sounds by and bye Seek me, his thoughts once steady, now in flow Seek me, heart racing back to long ago Heart dashing, blood pounding, he pains once more This, the loss of his love, forevermore To hear in his heart, seek her ‘long the shore Knowing he’ll not see her face, evermore Shades of sound rush to his ear, hot tears cast Hear me, seek me, loud silence from his past and he cries, his heart’s pain is so, so vast his spirit despairs, for the die that’s cast ~*~ 01.30.01 revised 04.11.02 |
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Martie
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since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Karilea I loved the sound of this outloud...it is very lyrical, a heart song, sad yet filled with evermore. |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Hear me, on ghost winds her words to him fly Hear me, his head tilts at sounds by and bye Seek me, his thoughts once steady, now in flow Seek me, heart racing back to long ago ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ Karilea...how wonderful for this to be my last read before sleep... lovely, haunting, lyrical. *I shall not even ask as to when you sleep... if indeed you do!*  Love this one...into the library it goes! ~Nite, hugs~ |
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ThisDiamond Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353Michigan, USA |
Hear me...seek me... The loss that can never be righted. I heard his tears. Very well done. ThisDiamond |
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Madame Chipmunk Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-05
Posts 8296Michigan |
An AWESOME poem, Karilea... Shades of sound rush to his ear, hot tears cast Hear me, seek me, loud silence from his past and he cries, his heart’s pain is so, so vast his spirit despairs, for the die that’s cast painful and romantic, all at once...  ~lots and lots of hugs~copyright2002 Lyra Nesius |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
sunshine you make byron wonder why they raved at him smooooooth stuff |
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Professor Gloom Member Elite
since 2000-07-23
Posts 3082of Depression |
The mood is set and developed well throughout the poem, The repeating words and similar rhymes (in the third and fourth Stanzas) are wonderful method, Enjoyed the poem greatly. Gloom |
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Rick Member Elite
since 2001-06-21
Posts 2903Victoria, Australia |
Dear Sunshine, this is a lovely piece of writing, I saw an old man sitting quietly and alone in a beautiful park watching over the sea, daydreaming as the breeze of day blew, remembering with sadness as the wispers of a past love rode by on the breeze of a sad goodbye. Loved it. Sincerely Rick |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Sunshine, Excellent write.  |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
wonderful.... |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
You Poet People are Precious! Thank you! |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
This one needs a *bump* back to the top of the heap! Yum words! She said burn ... together. |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
BRAVO!!! WOW!!! Has this really been on for over a month now, how did I ever miss this, this is wonderful! (smiles) You detail such typical human emotions with such life and expression, sweet friend, this is fantastic, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Karilea, thank you for sharing! May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
"Hear me", the softest whisper flows into the ears as a tear now shows "Seek me", compels and captivates him standing, listening, only the beat of a love torn heart.... Beautiful write Karilea....very very nice. |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
Bittersweet but so beautifully you! |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Yes, Mysteria...bittersweet, perhaps, but knowing the feel... wouldn't miss that for the world... especially when it can bring such good things... |
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