Open Poetry #20 |
Night-time Mindgames |
ThUnDeRkYsS Senior Member
since 1999-09-23
Posts 727Wisconsin |
Breathing, furthermore sometimes I wish wish it were not so enthralling wishing more for simple things, exhaling or inhaling something aromatic and refreshing for once watching at night as my artistic darkness overtakes the memories of what once was something enchanting I often encounter is the constant fading of what is soon to be feeling the memories pouring out of the midnight enchantress we call darkness soliloquy from my soul meeting the canvas in shades of pastel pearls on black outstanding where the solitude entangles the bitterness of what once was... feeling the heat rise from the floor, filled with intimation, caressing brushing my heart on its journey to the forbidden chapters in the creation of my story places that scare me for fear of discontent in what could be the never-ending shortcoming of this shadowed symphony me. Strive for higher levels, if they seem out of reach... Grow, and they will get closer. [This message has been edited by ThUnDeRkYsS (05-27-2002 01:44 PM).] |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
This is so very good. Wow, I can't come up with anythig more profound. I used to be able to write free verse, but now I cannot, and when it flows like this, it is so amazing Sandra |
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Zinsser Senior Member
since 2001-02-27
Posts 1641Calif. |
This is wonderfull... Sandra said it all... ~~ Connie ~~ |
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ThUnDeRkYsS Senior Member
since 1999-09-23
Posts 727Wisconsin |
Thank yous to both of you... this is only the second attempt I have ever made at writing free verse, something different for me I guess. Thanks again for the feedback Strive for higher levels, if they seem out of reach... Grow, and they will get closer. |
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Jessica
since 2001-06-28
Posts 350South AL |
This was terrific. You should give free-verse more of a chance to connect with you; you do extremely well at it. I write a lot of free-verse. It gives you the chance to say what's truely on your heart instead of having to find rhyme for everything and it turning out to be something completely diffrent than what you were thinking at the time. Very strong ending, also... Proud of you... *hugs* Jessica [This message has been edited by Jessica (05-30-2002 12:52 PM).] |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
ThUnDeRkYsS Well done enjoyed the read. |
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