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Amazing, Really
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Amazing, Really |
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Christopher
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-02
Posts 8296Purgatorial Incarceration 
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Amazing, Really ©2002 C.G. Ward beginning a Sunday morning, I glanced at the ceiling. saw a swirl of centers forming a heart-shaped ring around the whimper of another gasp. do you think that strange? I did, but didn't notice it. at least no more than the rarity of reality as it bludgeoned me with images from another movie… one you haven't seen, and doubtless wouldn’t like anyway - it was about love after all. oh, and we all know how you abhor that sentimentality. or any really - no, you'd rather stand in a field of plaid; each color marking clear boundaries of intricate equality, balanced only by the duality of of a purple strand that runs borders (times two in this foreign mix) between the crease of intimacy and the precipice of your denial. again - life's like this: somewhere in the middle, we find some choice, a bit of chance, stir in a cup of cost and consequence, then taste the batter to see if we can stomach another turn around the carousel that keeps throwing us as if we were nothing more than a feather tickling the nose of Zeus during allergy season. so, what then if we maintained? maybe we could catch a noonday train, bustle in with the commoners so you don't have maintain a grip for stability; you always preferred to sit anyway. I have no idea where this came from, and blame everything on the voices in my head… Chris [This message has been edited by Christopher (05-25-2002 05:17 AM).] |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Well Chris those voices are certainly active and somewhat complicated. The enitre piece is quite thought provoking! "no, you'd rather stand in a field of plaid; each color marking clear boundaries of intricate equality, balanced only by the duality of of a purple strand that runs borders (times two in this foreign mix) between the crease of intimacy and the precipice of your denial." I had a blanket like this at an old cottage I owned....It was a very warm blanket, heavy wool and you're right...I could pull it right over my eyes! |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
Weirdo  Heh...more commentary of a more helpful nature at a later point..  K |
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Elizabeth Cor Senior Member
since 2000-10-13
Posts 879Over the river and through the woods |
the voices? ~meganface~ ~head in hands~ ~smile~ I have a small story about the word amazing for you... have to save that one for later... |
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Christopher
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-02
Posts 8296Purgatorial Incarceration |
i know, i know, i know... i don't take credit for this!  ethome - thank you, and yeah, sometimes that's the easiest thing... until you suffocate yourself!  |
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SEA 
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
It reads really cool, but Kissy Face, I have no idea what you mean.....LOL.... |
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Tracey Member Elite
since 2001-08-29
Posts 2808where insanity meets breeding |
Those are some voices!!! If they spin out poetry like this, I wouldn’t be calling out the exorcists!! |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Okay. Here's the deal. I want a transplant. I would like the voices in YOUR head to replace the voices in MINE...or? at least shout them down? um...maybe an elephant gun? and yes..y'are...AMAZING..really |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
Your voices have a lot to say. "life's like this: somewhere in the middle, we find some choice, a bit of chance, stir in a cup of cost and consequence, then taste the batter to see if we can stomach another turn around the carousel that keeps throwing us as if we were nothing more than a feather tickling the nose of Zeus during allergy season." That was the best, to me. Some of the use of words here is quite amazing. Sandra |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
More voices, please. Mom |
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Zinsser Senior Member
since 2001-02-27
Posts 1641Calif. |
life's like this: somewhere in the middle, we find some choice, a bit of chance, stir in a cup of cost and consequence, then taste the batter to see if we can stomach another turn around the carousel that keeps throwing us as if we were nothing more than a feather tickling the nose of Zeus during allergy season. ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ this is great... enjoyed |
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Greeneyes
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
life's like this: somewhere in the middle, we find some choice, a bit of chance, stir in a cup of cost and consequence, ...... it is isnt it? nice hon....hugsss Lauren~ I would rather have one breath of his hair, |
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Duncan Member Ascendant
since 2001-08-07
Posts 5455 |
Whatever you've got, C...it's highly contagious. Hmmm, if I took off work today, I could ramble. Work, ramble...ramble, work. but I'm lonely now, and I don't know how |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Christopher, YOU are amazing! These voices you hear are truly magical! Send them up north...to me! |
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Christopher
Moderator
Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-02
Posts 8296Purgatorial Incarceration |
Susanofer - What makes you think I do???  Tracey - I exercise my voices all the time no plus - Oh, that's not what you meant. Thanks Red. Midi-K - Transplant... hmmm... what's it worth to you - better yet, let's go for the shouting down, i can always use someone else's voices to take my aggression out on! Sandra - Thanks for your kind blessing on this wacky piece. Kari - Uhmm... i can't get rid of them, so i'm sure you'll "hear" more.  Zinnser - Thanks, that was my favorite piece too, crazier than the rest. Lauren - Oh yes, it is.  D - I'm glad it's contaigious - i like what you've been doing lately, a lot. Thanks m'man. Nancy - Blushing here. Thank you, and i'll see how much it costs to fed ex some voices! Thanks all, Chris |
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kaile
since 2000-02-06
Posts 5146singapore |
Chris, never explain your amazing writing away with a trite "voices in my head"..you'll only annoy the rest of us who are trying their darnest to churn out a piece that will be classified as poetry...  beginning a Sunday morning, I glanced at the ceiling. saw a swirl of centers forming a heart-shaped ring around the whimper of another gasp. i first thought of a spider gradually spinning its web, then i thought this must be the written form of how special effects are done..i imagined a big smoky O coming out from a person's mouth, slow motion do you think that strange? I did, but didn't notice it. at least no more than the rarity of reality as it bludgeoned me with images from another movie… one you haven't seen, and doubtless wouldn’t like anyway - it was about love after all. oh, and we all know how you abhor that sentimentality. think "rarity of reality" is a cool thought...made me wonder what kind of reality the personna was looking for...dig the part about the love movie...liked the personal touch, yet it was something that we all could relate to...i'm sure we all know people who hate sentimentality life's like this: somewhere in the middle, we find some choice, a bit of chance, stir in a cup of cost and consequence, then taste the batter to see if we can stomach another turn around the carousel that keeps throwing us as if we were nothing more than a feather tickling the nose of Zeus during allergy season. Oh my gosh!!(the babbling is intended)...the humour is appreciated...yet this was thought-provoking to me at the same time...i interpreted this as meaning that we are all beings always struggling to ditch our insecurities aside and venture to try out stuff, only to discover how petty and insignificant we are in the grand scheme of things... then i read about "allergy" and had to smile. made me think of the mouse and the elephant--how the former, despite being small, can create chaos in the latter... the "C" words were appreciated..choice, chance, cost, consequence...i felt this summed up life succinctly.. so, what then if we maintained? maybe we could catch a noonday train, bustle in with the commoners so you don't have maintain a grip for stability; you always preferred to sit anyway. i am one of those who just can't stand in trains..i can happily ditch my friends and grab the lone seat and amuse myself, just so i can rest my weary legs... preferring to sit as compared to being stuck in a comfort zone? i dig the thought(if i'm reading this correctly) but man, you have to be silly if you find an empty seat and don't sit on it.. ya, i thought this was too good to leave with a "great work" comment...  [This message has been edited by faterider (05-27-2002 07:48 AM).] |
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kaile
since 2000-02-06
Posts 5146singapore |
er, the stanza Eric highlighted...i thought it was clever, too clever actually..i don't know what to think.. ..will love to hear your thoughts on them...and don't be too frustrated with me if i read everything wrongly...  |
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Christopher
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-02
Posts 8296Purgatorial Incarceration |
wow, thanks FR! i have to go here soon, but will come back later to reply! one thing now though - i don't get upset with any interpretation someone takes from my writing as long as they've actually read the piece! and you definitely did (and, were dead on to my intent in most places!) |
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