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Christopher

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0 posted 2002-05-23 04:30 PM

Interlude to Sorrow
© 2002 C.G. Ward

you made me blow smoke in your ear
to soothe a silence that the tilt of my smile
could no longer ease.

prostrate, we rated our performance.
Annushka, Annushka rise!
like Rasputin, attempted to hail
a prophetic interlude to sorrow.

bent of will, collapsed.
then to realise that twenty-six shades of grey
still means the world is painted - black, and white.

"it is only life, after all,"
mentioned as I buried a strand of tears
inside the safety of your hair,
before plucking a rose from the slim of my sleeve
as if I were an aging wizard
and your pain could be magicked away.

[This message has been edited by Christopher (05-23-2002 06:31 PM).]

serenity blaze
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1 posted 2002-05-23 04:42 PM

hey...whenever pain abates...it not only feels like magick..it IS..

and? why do I get the feeling there's a story behind this:

"Annushka, Annushka rise!"?

tapping foot...I'm WAITING!

I loved the pull the flower from your sleeve bit too..and now you've got me thinking..DRAT YOU BRAT! SMOOCHES

I think I'll go ramble this evening as the sun goes down too!

nakdthoughts
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2 posted 2002-05-23 04:50 PM

loved the tenderness in this one Chris...

ethome
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3 posted 2002-05-23 05:02 PM

Like the reference to the shades of grey.....The entire poem is very tender and insightful!

Christopher

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4 posted 2002-05-23 05:11 PM

Around the time of WWI, Anna Alexandrovna Vyrubova - a confidante of Aleksandra Fyodorovna of the Imperial family in St. Petersberg - was in a railroad accident that put her in a coma, and brought her to the cusp of death. The doctors were sure that she would not live throughout the night. Rushing to her side, Rasputin - a close friend and self-proclaimed holy man – held her hand and repeated “Annushka, Annushka rise!” She stirred slightly, and Rasputin dropped her hand. Wearily, he stated that she would live, but that for the rest of her life she would be crippled. And it was so.

Now see if you can figure how that fits in the poem.

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serenity blaze
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5 posted 2002-05-23 05:12 PM

oooh.

You are evil.

heh heh.

I love it!

Martie

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6 posted 2002-05-23 05:46 PM

Chris

'it is only life, after all,"
mentioned as I buried a strand of tears
inside the safety of your hair,
before plucking a rose from the slim of my sleeve
as if I were an aging wizard
and your pain could be magicked away.'

Interesting ...and loved this last part above, especially, "buried a strand of tears". And thanks for the explanation.

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7 posted 2002-05-23 06:19 PM

Jaw drops.

Jaw is now on the floor...

MY GOD.

'Brava, brava'

Firstly...I adore studying the Russian royal family - they fascinate me - that Rasputin..I still want to know how he survived being poisoned and shot before being found in the river..

the reference is superb.

Now...I SO want a LBL on this one...and I find myself wondering if there is anything I would want to change in this at all..

I hope you're not calling this a ramble.

K

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8 posted 2002-05-23 07:23 PM

bent of will, collapsed.
then to realise that twenty-six shades of grey
still means the world is painted - black, and white.

Pretty much what it comes down to.
I usually read your poetry seeral times before I comment but this is really a great verse, so I'll just say that, for now.

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9 posted 2002-05-23 07:30 PM

Christopher~

This is indeed very clever....the way you worded it, the flow, and the meaning behind it....Nice..

Lauren~

I would rather have one breath of his hair,
one kiss of his mouth,
one touch of his hand
than an eternity without it.

[This message has been edited by Greeneyes (05-23-2002 07:31 PM).]

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10 posted 2002-05-23 09:39 PM

Ahhh..the Romanov dynasty..and the ones who gave it some spice. Could Rasputin be an analogy of you?..trying to rewind..revive, repeat? perhaps something that suffered in the foreground of your youth?...hmmm dunno darlin' but this reminds me of stage, opera, and the crushing quiet of hearing the last word...really wonderful stuff..

Sincerely,
Reg

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11 posted 2002-05-23 09:47 PM

"it is only life, after all,"
mentioned as I buried a strand of tears
inside the safety of your hair,
before plucking a rose from the slim of my sleeve
as if I were an aging wizard
and your pain could be magicked away.
~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~
Chris, this is fantastic!
I have read this last verse over several times....love the magic of it!
~Hugs~

~Somewhere in my heart I'm always
dancing with you in the summer rain~

Sunshine

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12 posted 2002-05-23 09:49 PM

You've done your homework!

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13 posted 2002-05-23 10:12 PM

you made me blow smoke in your ear
to soothe a silence that the tilt of my smile
could no longer ease.
==============================
bent of will, collapsed.
then to realise that twenty-six shades of grey
still means the world is painted - black, and white.

===========================

whoa...this one is deep and layered..and very very cool.
this is no ramble...this is tight, inventive writing that opens portals as the muse closes a door. As Duncan says...takes a moment and distills it.
Love the title too...superb write poet C

mothyme

I remembering being one and the same ...
closer even than the heat and the flame.

Tom Kimmel

Christopher

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14 posted 2002-05-24 12:29 PM

Karen - as you can see, there's your answer. of course, this is only mentioned in part of the story - though it plays a larger part in the poem... consider it a puzzle. Thank you for your appreciation, as always... think i might have a magic trick for you here somewhere...

M - i have a soft side too... it's just usually buried. *grin* thank you.

ethome - i do that a lot... grey is my second favorite color. thank you for reading.

Karen - yeah, i am.

Martie - thank you as well. that one actually started out as an image of brushing "her" hair behind her ears (a "habit" i have), but since i'd already used the word "ear" in the beginning, i needed to find a different image, and that's the one that came out. Thank you.

L'il K - Have i stunned the great poetic geniusess? I couldnt' honestly tell you what brought the royal family to mind, though that is what inspired this piece. As to LBL - we'll see... depends on what kind of mood you catch me in!

No, this isn't a ramble. it started as one, but i liked it too much to just "plop down" on the screen. hugs you

Duncan - Hello, m'man. I'm very interested in your revised take on this. we seem to travel very similar paths, and it's very cool to see that reflection. Thank you.

Lauren - Thanks lady - clever? does that mean i'm smart after all? Who'd-a'thunk?

Reg - You're getting there... you seem to see what i write fairly intuitively. In this case, your stab at the analogy is right on, and carried through. Thank you for putting that out. *grin*

Nancy - Magic. That's a good word. Thank you.

Kari - Homework? Naw... i just remember things every once in a while. Thanks.

MothyYou - and you've got the other half: layered. There's a lot you can say about different things if you play with the words a bit. Thanks for the distillation... now hand me a glass?

Peace around,

Chris

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15 posted 2002-05-24 01:19 AM

Kissy face

this is amazing...

"bent of will, collapsed.
then to realise that twenty-six shades of grey
still means the world is painted - black, and white.

"it is only life, after all,"
mentioned as I buried a strand of tears
inside the safety of your hair,
before plucking a rose from the slim of my sleeve
as if I were an aging wizard
and your pain could be magicked away."

wow....

Christopher

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16 posted 2002-05-24 01:11 PM

hey susanofer - good to see you back, and thanks!

Severn
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17 posted 2002-05-24 10:00 PM

this gets to go back up...

(not stunned..merely impressed..)

K

Christopher

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18 posted 2002-05-25 04:37 AM

thanks l'il k - didn't do much good, but thanks.

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19 posted 2002-05-27 08:00 AM

let me try..

er, i had a quick scan..looks another goodie...will comment and ask pesky questions soon...

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20 posted 2002-05-27 08:22 AM

I think after hearing your explanations, I am enjoying your words and thought pattern even more...My one set of grandparents were from Russia and I even have an individual samovar with the Czars insigna on it... I enjoy reading and hearing about Russian history.

thanks again
M

Christopher

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21 posted 2002-05-27 02:53 PM

thanks! i had fun with this one (that's the point, isn't it!) i too enjoy russian history... at least more than most. not a huge history buff as it's normally looked at, though do dig a lot of the little factiods you find here and there.

peace 'n' hugs

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