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Walk Among Thunder Rolls
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Walk Among Thunder Rolls |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA 
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Into the dawn of breaking light, until the mome’ of fear dispel when whispers raise the hair in fright of things unseen which now I tell From shapes and shrieks in vision seeks to creaks upon the floor in walk when darkness in the night then speaks in whispers of the walk and talk. From in the flash of light in boom where thunder cracks a window’s pane among the dread they walk the room in search of more and then again. As still becomes the calm of fright when light does dwell in corner dark till ‘gain the wane of day in light returns the view of haunt in stark. From time before the hunt of man to time beyond the search of souls the haunt will prowl of ghastly hand whence ‘gain the flash in thunder rolls [This message has been edited by Magnus (05-19-2002 03:17 PM).] |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
I shall mark this as a Keeper, and wait for a good thunderous night on which to read again...it just begs for that sort of atmosphere.... |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
Oh....to do this at a campfire.....with a few wolves howling in the background... Me thinks....NO ONE would sleep that night!! I would love to read this to a pack of pre-teen boy scouts....with a mask on... YIKES!!! (No, I would not be that cruel) Hmmmmmmm??? |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Great write Barry! ~Hugs~ *please check your email* |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Mangus, A good strong write, enjoyed |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
Thanx Nancy....NOW I understand it all... I will work on my own thoughts...even though they certainly won't be adequate...as Karilea pointed out.... |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
Magnus darling boy this was spectacular, you have such power in your words, never do you fail to inject atmosphere into your writing not many can do that even half so well. YOU always do, you write the scene, you recreate it with the mind of the reader, Are you good, is this divine, well, only if you need air to breathe it is. Absolutely superb writing I love it utterly utterly love it   Love and warm stuff As always Mushy  Breathe through the heat of our desire |
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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
  (big hugggsssssss) Wow, this is so very striking, sweet friend, this reminds me very much of my darker days when I was young and I feared falling asleep because I was worried I would be struck by lightning! (sigh) This is powerful, sweet friend, I love it, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet friend, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
So glad that I didn't miss this one, Mag!!! I love the ominous tone here (suits me, I think) This read itself aloud to me, I could hear each word echo...I wish I had written this! |
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CowgirlFreedom17 Member
since 2002-05-20
Posts 82Mississippi |
Great write!~ No, Wonderful! Don't hold back the words you really mean. |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
yes. . . I can hear it. . . loud and full. . . well done Sir. . . ---------------------------------------------------------- To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world. |
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