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Think of the Grass
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Think of the Grass |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla 
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Think of the Grass Lust stays sway above the grass Impressed by just a moments pass And filigree dances spree Amongst the shadows of debris And breath on breath hovers sweet Above the dissipating heat Taken up on spindles wrap To package up a day of map A day of quest a day of crest A day of zest that heaved my chest A day that bubbled up and curled The leavings of an afterworld And thus a page of stay is left Taken from the day in theft And placed above an alters store A mirror to eternals door To live upon the fern and sea And turn my hearts forever key. |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
"A day of quest a day of crest A day of zest that heaved my chest A day that bubbled up and curled The leavings of an afterworld" What a wonderful piece Sy ... I loved the lines above particularly, with their internal rhymes ... I just had to read that out loud. Well done!  Best wishes and hugs, /Kit |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Think of the grass, count the leaves afterwards just allow me breathe for pages turn, as pages do and I would walk the quest with you... |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Kit, Best wishes and hugs back have a wonderful day.   Sunshine, Always glad to have sunshine along. |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
And breath on breath hovers sweet Above the dissipating heat Taken up on spindles wrap To package up a day of map A day of quest a day of crest A day of zest that heaved my chest A day that bubbled up and curled The leavings of an afterworld And thus a page of stay is left Taken from the day in theft And placed above an alters store A mirror to eternals door =================================== Stinky...I could eat your rhymes with a spoon!!! You are so cool!! This poem is sooooo cool!! And placed above an alters store A mirror to eternals door How cool is that!!! WAAAAY COOOL I do so love the way your mind talks to you pen in kind!!  Good Morning Sy-babes....and Randy   |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
Seymour my dearest friend you heal the night with your joyous and beauteous writing, this is one of your finest writes ever it shines with a Seymour’s special glow, vying with the stars to bejewel this page of beauty. Do I love this? Of course I do This is simply stunning writing, utterly utterly stunning. How beautiful the words in this are, the flow is as smooth as silk, the phrasing perfect, and the timing is absolutely spot on Purely divinely written poetry always you manage to write exceptionally well    Love and warm stuff As always Mushy To give light to them that sit in darkness..... to guide our feet into the way of peace Luke 2:79 |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
JM, Good morning love from both of me. It is raining outside and a day to stay inside. But I will be passing your way in thought. Perhaps to say a brief hello or share some raspbery jello. I'll hold your hand in fairy land and speak to you of time and sand. And then we'll fly into the sky on the broomstick of why. Of cource Randy will be scratching his head but what do dragons know? Winkiewinkie Stinky. |
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Rick Member Elite
since 2001-06-21
Posts 2903Victoria, Australia |
Seymour, really enjoyed this work, was a nice ending to my night of reads. And turn my hearts forever key Liked this line, a heart of eternal love opened. Sincerely Rick |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Marsha, If this were olden days and I were a prince. I'd make you part of my harem. You are always such a delight. |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Rick, Thank you for the lovely comment. |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
Join the crowd...raining here too.... Sy....Another one of your very fluid well crafted pieces of life... You do this very well... B. |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Magnus, We need the rain, Thank you for the nice comment. |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
Sy, I can see the grass is a little greener on your side of the fence it must the poetry flowing over it. Keth Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind. Unknown |
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Martie
Moderator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Sy I love all your poems, but for some reason this one touched a deep place. Thank you for that, dear man! |
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Duncan Member Ascendant
since 2001-08-07
Posts 5455 |
Like the way this feels like the words are dancing, Sy. |
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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
Wow!!! I love the swaying feel of these words, sweet friend, it felt like I was standing in a southern meadow in the springtime caressed by the zephyr! (big hugggssssss) This is lovely, sweet friend, I love it, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Seymour, thank you for sharing! May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Keth, One would hope it was green for both. Martie, Thank you my dear. Noah, Thank you my friend. |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
You turn my heart's forever key again and again with your wonderful compositions, dear Seymour. *S* This is a delight to read and a joy to contemplate. *S* |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Suthern As you are a joy to read. |
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Honeybee Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-26
Posts 5372Ontario, CANADA |
I hold a high regard for the majority of your poems, but, this one is beyond exquisite! It flows like silk and has such zing and depth to it. You must dream in metaphor and meter?! Sy, this poem is just too cool, I really enjoyed it. This is begging to be a keeper Take care, Melissa~ "Poetry is not an opinion expressed... |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Melissa Anything that gives you pleasure gives me pleasure. Thank you sweet. |
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