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dark dance shadow
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dark dance shadow |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738
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inbetween the lines of "if" inbetween the lines of "are" inbetween the lines of "were" know there stands the line of "cause"-- trail of blood that leads to hurt... inbetween myself and her. inbetween lines stand alone spaces I can call my own... inbetween these eyes I've bled... between a life? a prayer of death. Amidst myself inbetween shadows dancing in a dream Amidst myself I'm inbetween dark dance shadows on a screen... dancing as a life is freed. dancing life in circled greed... dark dance shadow on my knees shadows dancing dark concede... |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
There is nothing "in between" about this piece, it is all excellence. Kethry |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
heavy layers of dark cloth with pale skin lady under, lifting edges enjoyed you ms |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Amidst myself inbetween shadows dancing in a dream Amidst myself I'm inbetween dark dance shadows on a screen... dancing as a life is freed. dancing life in circled greed... dark dance shadow on my knees shadows dancing dark concede... ================================== your pen is doing some poetic pirouettes of its own in this melancholy beauty me twin. (and now ya got "Dancing in the Dark" running thru my head)    How long can a girl be haunted by you ... |
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Tiersdin Member Elite
since 2000-11-17
Posts 2364east coast |
loved the flow of this, Serenity and the words. I often dance amid the shadows too... ~Tier "I shall never bond again, as I have bonded with you..." |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
why do I know that you're one with the darkness?? perhaps I will find out. . . well done. . . --------------------------------------------------------- To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world. |
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Duncan Member Ascendant
since 2001-08-07
Posts 5455 |
inbetween lines stand alone spaces I can call my own... Love watchin' you dance, K. |
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Cirrus Member
since 2002-05-12
Posts 55 |
Hey Gorgeous! remember me? Loved the flow of this and especially could relate to these lines..... inbetween the lines of "if" inbetween the lines of "are" inbetween the lines of "were" know there stands the line of "cause"-- trail of blood that leads to hurt... inbetween myself and her. Have missed reading you. |
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Logan Senior Member
since 2001-05-28
Posts 1641Arkansas |
Ahhhh, Serenity...very gentle smile..of the inbetween..there is still always you..of goodness be..nice read |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
Serenity darling girl This is seriously excellent writing, the flow of this is perfect, the internal pace and the construction cannot be bettered. And the form perfect absolutely perfect. Not a thing in between about this it is utterly utterly excellent  Love and warm stuff As always Mushy  To give light to them that sit in darkness..... to guide our feet into the way of peace Luke 2:79 |
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Gemini Senior Member
since 1999-12-15
Posts 1203Wisconsin, USA |
I sense a warmth of being inbetween. Very splendid write. |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Even I like to cast a an occasional shadow...lol...a grim chore, being in light and all that, but hey... Thanks all so much...sorry I haven't been reading much...been in that "silent writing mode" again...love you all much...THANK YOU for being so kind. |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
This reminds me of the Cure's "Inbetween days," which is compliment enough... I love yr writing. She said burn ... together. |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
whoa...and cirrus??? CIRRUS? izzat YOU LUSCIOUS???? stumble blind hugs say it is so!!! aw...c'mere baby....hugs to heart. and damn Mike, you say the nicest things! |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Just popped in to say... I LOVE THIS PIECE!!! ~hugs~ ~Somewhere in my heart I'm always |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
This is inbetween superb and superber... errr, more superb..... or spendiforous/// |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
  BRAVO!!! This is absolutely wonderful, sweet friend, those ifs and ares and weres are indeed the conjunctions of all of relationships we endure with others and we must always look more than just in-between each hiatus to fully appreciate liberty of it all! (kiss on cheek) This is excellent, sweet friend, I love it, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Karen, thank you for sharing! May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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MIdsummerRain Member
since 2002-05-19
Posts 175St. Louis, Missouri |
inbetween the lines of "if" inbetween the lines of "are" inbetween the lines of "were" know there stands the line of "cause"-- trail of blood that leads to hurt... inbetween myself and her. ~I LoVeD It!!! Im counting on more to come! Though nothing can bring back the hour |
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Cirrus Member
since 2002-05-12
Posts 55 |
Hey Beautiful, yup it is I! darn I've really missed your lusciousness, gorgeous. Hugs HUgs and HUGS!!! |
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