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Soleil Noir
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0 posted 2002-05-15 10:27 AM


Accent on Light’ning

He fabricated visions,
crafting moods’
swing

in rooms of his life
he placed lights
here,
there, soft recesses
of pale filtering

casting shadows

amber tones

moving from room to room
he only accented positives

negatives had their own
place,
behind him, away

in one room
he found her waiting,
looking,
searching,

saw green eyes
but too much light
surrounded her sound

he knew she needed his
touch of accent

to make her green eyes
want to open wide to soft light

darken with positive touch

he took her to a room
he made atypical

for her

then, he
gathered slivers of amber light
highsighed a few rose tones
blended a soupçon of carnal
radiance

then uncovered a fragrance
containing her essence
added his to fuse

musk would become her scent

he felt sheer
was the sound to enhance
her grace
draped it around,
and then,

he welcomed her in

he took a vision
accent on light’ning

and made her glow from within



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Martie
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1 posted 2002-05-15 10:31 AM


So many wonderful images here, Soleil....and a perfect ending.  
Seymour Tabin
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2 posted 2002-05-15 10:34 AM


Soleil Noir
Elegant, is all I can think of for now.

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3 posted 2002-05-15 10:36 AM


*sigh*

so many wonderful images and meanings here, what a beautiful poem you have penned....


Lauren~

I would rather have one breath of his hair,
one kiss of his mouth,
one touch of his hand
than an eternity without it.

Dark Stranger
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4 posted 2002-05-15 10:43 AM


photographicly perfect
can see every detail
with my eyes closed

enjoyed it ms noir

doreen peri
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5 posted 2002-05-15 10:53 AM


how'd you know?

lol

i love it!

a fine write

Tiersdin
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6 posted 2002-05-15 11:02 AM


You've such a way with words...

soft and sensual...

~Tier

"I shall never bond again, as I have bonded with you..."

LRbaba
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7 posted 2002-05-15 11:06 AM


I'm blushing ms noir
this tune is fire understated
like a dashel hammet script
look for the next episode
great metric flow by the way
i like how spare and stringy
your lines are
more

LR

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8 posted 2002-05-15 11:09 AM


enjoyed
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9 posted 2002-05-15 11:42 AM


Soleil Noir darling girl this is such an absolutely beautiful write, you’ve written the images so well. Truly exquisite writing the sparseness of simplicity blended into a perfect accent of light and shade. This is really one of mademoiselle’s finest pieces. Utterly utterly excellent writing


Love and warm stuff
As always
Mushy

To give light to them that sit in darkness..... to guide our feet into the way of peace Luke 2:79


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10 posted 2002-05-15 03:46 PM


yes. . . to find the right accents. . . for another's heart. . .

well done. . .

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To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world.

Enchantress
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11 posted 2002-05-15 04:08 PM


then, he
gathered slivers of amber light
highsighed a few rose tones
blended a soupçon of carnal
radiance
~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~
Far, far too many phrases I love here for me to choose one or two....this is very...very...soft and sensual and I love it!!  
Wonderful!  
I'm so glad I didn't miss this one!
~Hugs~

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12 posted 2002-05-15 06:26 PM


I truly do like the feel of this poem....
all the way to the ending...which is
OHHHH YEAH!!!!!

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13 posted 2002-05-20 01:33 AM


All sparks have in reaching
destination sought often without
within as yet to touch knowing
is the touch flaming
the light leading
illumination
calling

Well said
EH

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14 posted 2002-05-20 02:01 AM


Wow this is good stuff -- all the way to the title.

I love yr words.

She said burn ... together.
-TON

Christopher
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15 posted 2002-05-21 01:19 PM


diggin' this. i like the soft hues throughout, and the emphasis on positive. tres cool.

C

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16 posted 2002-05-21 02:12 PM


Beautiful writing, with so much sensuality.
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17 posted 2002-05-21 03:30 PM


lots of sensuality and eloquence in your approach.touche ms noir


Madame Chipmunk
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18 posted 2002-05-21 09:43 PM


A lovely sensuous poem, Soliel

he felt sheer
was the sound to enhance
her grace
draped it around,
and then,

he welcomed her in

he took a vision
accent on light’ning

and made her glow from within


and what a perfectly beautiful ending!

~soft hugs

Lyra

copyright2002 Lyra Nesius

"poetry is life distilled"  Gwendolyn Brooks

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19 posted 2002-05-21 10:26 PM




(smiles) Awwwwwww, I love this, sweet friend, and may loves eyes always sparkle with that soft lightning and bring a spark to your heart always! (big hugggssssss) This is lovely, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Soleil, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

"Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..."

Shakira

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20 posted 2002-05-22 12:35 PM


So beautiful! I'm saving this one, to read again later, under the full effects of the midnight sun.
Zinsser
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21 posted 2002-05-22 10:38 AM


such class..... beautiful
~~ Connie ~~

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