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Honeybee
Member Ascendant

since 1999-12-26

Posts 5372
Ontario, CANADA

0 posted 2002-04-10 02:56 PM

Inside Looking Out

At the window
she sees
the reflection of another
in prisms of distorted truth
piercing back with elusive eyes
never worn, never opened
to catch a glint of light
in the flutter of lashes
untraced by the wind's fingertips

The clouds begin to clash outside
into rolling screams of thunder
seeping endless rain
from the break in the deep of her heart
of beat that bears the stain,
knowing there must be something more,
some miracle to moist the milk in her breast
as her hand slowly falls down the glass pane
haunting the vision

She becomes the whispering weep of willow
rustling the restless leaves
against the canvas of a beautiful world
that cannot play her inner crescendo
to restore the years bitterly waged in defeat,
imprisoned by the masks
that refuse to melt with prayer

Though she breathes a sigh of smiles
that tangos 'round the wink of her soul,
what she feels stirring within
does not match what drapes on skin,
in the tragedy of life's comedy
she sees only the beast

She bows once more for their applause,
brilliance on display,
no need to rehearse with strings intact,
never missing a cue, a line, a step
in masquerade of illusion.
Still, they applaud
she has fooled them all,
even herself for a moment

The real of her remains unread
as she fades just out of reach, out of place
in a stranger's flesh
with dream still young, though fragile
in a song
sorrowed to mute

Somewhere in time she will find what lies beneath,
beyond and below the layers of shame.
Though she is hollow, a fraud in fate's gown,
she knows that someday
a new morn will paint her in shades she recognizes
where the healing begins
to savour the sun
with a sky to call her own

By Melissa P. Monette

nakdthoughts
Member Laureate

since 2000-10-29

Posts 19200
Between the Lines

1 posted 2002-04-10 03:14 PM

The real of her remains unread
as she fades just out of reach, out of place
in a stranger's flesh
with dream still young, though fragile
in a song
sorrowed to mute

there is so much to like about your poem... I shall save and read a bit more to gather more of its meaning

M

Sven

Member Laureate

since 1999-11-23

Posts 14937
East Lansing, MI USA

2 posted 2002-04-10 03:22 PM

someday indeed my friend. . .

the need cries out in this one. . . excellent. . .

-------------------------------------------------------

To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world.

passing shadows
Member Empyrean

since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
displaced

3 posted 2002-04-10 03:42 PM

this one is wonderful! I love the pic afterwards, it set off the whole piece! I can relate to this poem very well.

Janet Marie
Member Laureate

since 2000-01-22

Posts 18554

4 posted 2002-04-10 03:59 PM

piercing back with elusive eyes
never worn, never opened
to catch a glint of light
in the flutter of lashes
untraced by the wind's fingertips

The clouds begin to clash outside
into rolling screams of thunder
seeping endless rain
from the break in the deep of her heart
of beat that bears the stain,
knowing there must be something more,
some miracle to moist the milk in her breast
as her hand slowly falls down the glass pane
haunting the vision
==============================

Your just so good at this emotive poetry Melis...this is an aching, haunting write...
and the imagery is a well defined as the emotions expressed. Good to read you again girlie.
heart-hugs

how about how good it feels to finally forgive you
~~~
the moment I jumped off of it ... was the moment I touched down.

~Alanis Morissette~

Mistletoe Angel

Member Empyrean

since 2000-12-17

Posts 32816
Portland, Oregon

5 posted 2002-04-10 04:26 PM

(big hugggssssss) This is soooooo emotionally powerful, sweet friend, may time ease all the hurt in her heart and bring her comfort to a brand new days approaching where all her dreams come true! (kiss on cheek) This is wonderful, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Melissa, thank you for sharing!

May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

Enchantress
Member Empyrean

since 2001-08-14

Posts 35113
Canada eh.

6 posted 2002-04-10 04:28 PM

Melissa, this is a most powerful and beautiful write. One to keep and read over and over again...excellent!
Hugs.

~Somewhere in my heart I'm always
dancing with you in the summer rain~

Balladeer

Administrator

Member Empyrean

since 1999-06-05

Posts 25505
Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA

7 posted 2002-04-10 10:28 PM

Ah, patootie girl, you can set such a mood with your words....you put me right there with you in this one.....applause

SmittenKitten
Senior Member

since 2001-06-20

Posts 1131
where the sky and horizon meet

8 posted 2002-04-11 12:08 PM

"Though she breathes a sigh of smiles
that tangos 'round the wink of her soul,
what she feels stirring within
does not match what drapes on skin"

"Though she breathes a sigh of smiles
that tangos 'round the wink of her soul,
what she feels stirring within
does not match what drapes on skin"

Melissabee~ Ohhhh...this is so achingly beautiful! My skin tingles from the resonating impact of your words.....is it enough to say that this piece speaks to me? I truly *feel* the lines.
This is a keeper for sure.

Hugs,
~Krista

Your beautiful words & creativity allow me to connect with the same in myself.
Thank you for having the courage to share yourself so that I can too

catalinamoon

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-06-03

Posts 9543
The Shores of Alone

9 posted 2002-04-11 11:08 AM

Melissa, I love this, as you always seem to express my feelings so well. Beautifully done. And where do you find the great pictures?
Sandra

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