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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines 
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Failing At night I try to, undisturbed but fail, my body acts on me. No longer is it mine to drive, my inside wants the out to be. And so I'm sleepness one more time as thoughts of you keep entering. Comfort now, has lost its cause on life of mine, yours centering. Those arms that could, just are not there. Those lips I wish, seem not to care. I lay me down time-in-between the emptiness, becomes routine. Once again I'm here beside to catch a bit of maybe you. The silence reigns, the dampness flows the ever-want brings morning dew. Just because I seek it so a world that holds a place for me imprisoned without want, I feel 'til morning comes to set me free. M "Love is not blind - It sees more and not less, but because it sees more, it is willing to see less." |
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D.Lester Young Senior Member
since 2001-12-08
Posts 1219Austin, Tx |
The emptiness of missing someone was captured here in powerful verse. Blessings that the arms that surround you next will make you sing more. [This message has been edited by D.Lester Young (05-12-2002 09:36 AM).] |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
Mauree darling girl this is wonderful. This is a very special piece from you darling boy, incredible writing full of such aching and loneliness. I love it, It’s wonderful to see you work darling heart absolutely wonderful. I love it utterly utterly love it  Love and warm stuff As always Mushy   To give light to them that sit in darkness..... to guide our feet into the way of peace Luke 2:79 |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Maureen, Smile and the world smiles with you. Nice write, enjoyed |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
thank you Sy...I am always smiling even when I don't feel it inside... Marsha, this one came to me when still awake with this hold on me...*s Happy Mom's Day to you... Thank you DL...arms would help..health even more so...and a good nights sleep maybe..s M |
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Logan Senior Member
since 2001-05-28
Posts 1641Arkansas |
In the deep of down inside let the thoughts of friends reside for not alone as you may feel for they are true with no conceal touching write, Maureen, but very well done..very gentle smile |
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Madame Chipmunk Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-05
Posts 8296Michigan |
This is beautiful, Maureen... I have been dreaming of my late first husband a lot lately for some reason, so I really identify with this. Once again I'm here beside to catch a bit of maybe you. ~dreamy hugsLyra |
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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
  (big hugggsssssss) Oh Maureen, this is so very powerful, sweet friend, I relate to this so very well because there is one girl I feel so very strongly about that I love so very much, Joanna, and I dream ever so much of being with her but right now I cope with the loneliness in meeting her someday! (kiss on cheek) This is wonderful, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Maureen, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
night is a great time for thinking, I think...nice one M. |
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Zinsser Senior Member
since 2001-02-27
Posts 1641Calif. |
beautiful.... I really like this piece ~~ Connie ~~ |
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