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79 AD. (which town was this?)
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79 AD. (which town was this?) |
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ecrivan Member Elite
since 2001-12-10
Posts 3923my own state 
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Town within sight of a smouldering mount caught in struggles of departure, turn about; warned of impending cataclysm began to surface sandaled folk wandered about, no apparent purpose. Columned, cobbled roads and guttered avenues news of immminent disaster ruined planned venues residents of the town continued about their ways the only ones to depart were those gone astray. capture the moment, a gigantic smoke stack puffs smoke issued forth first, it's the lighter stuff; then lava streams flow forth, of decent porportions consume everything in their paths, minor distortions? Capture that moment, listen to the earth again villagers live at its foot in mirth, heedless of new puffs from its tireless crest town within its site, a long forgotten test. Today visiters witness body casts detected covered by lava, they were then protected; preserved for eternity, in fetal positions testimony of folk who ignored predictions. [This message has been edited by ecrivan (04-22-2002 10:29 PM).] |
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ThisDiamond Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353Michigan, USA |
Pompeii (sp?), as history re-rights itself... You always spin my mind to the about face. I really enjoy your work. ThisDiamond |
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Greeneyes  
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
good on you, making us think Lauren~ ~Sinking fast into a ocean of you, what if told you, what if I said that I love you do we dare cross that line between your heart and mine~ [This message has been edited by Greeneyes (04-23-2002 01:00 PM).] |
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John Yaws Senior Member
since 1999-10-09
Posts 860Texas |
Pompey...victim to Vesuvius |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Ecrivan, a most interesting post. The only suggestion I would make is to sprinkle, here and there, a line or two of the supposed warnings in quotes...like whispers, or how someone feels a minor tremble beneath the feet... this type of writing is something I enjoy very much...thanks for the history lesson! |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Well, Pompeii is always the favorite choice but it could have been Herculaneum as well... |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
Martin darling boy this is wonderful writing, you never cease to amaze me, without doubt you are a fabulous writer. This is as is usual for you a vibrantly alive piece. Which place is it? It could be that island off of Crete, the place where the Minoans and their civilisation You know I absolutely love this don’t you. Utterly utterly perfect. How can you write so consistently well    Love and warm stuff As always Mushy To give light to them that sit in darkness..... to guide our feet into the way of peace Luke 2:79 |
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paladin
since 2001-08-05
Posts 930Pensacola,Fl. |
I spent two days visting there.It was wonderfull. paladin |
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ecrivan Member Elite
since 2001-12-10
Posts 3923my own state |
Balladeer, I was under the impression that Herculeum was only hit by ash and not a lava run, at least that's what one historian says Karilea, Think I work on the whispers at a later date  |
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ecrivan Member Elite
since 2001-12-10
Posts 3923my own state |
Pompeii is one of America's favorite as far as American students studying in Italy is concerned.. Diamond..it's a pleasure to add originality to this and any other poetry site. Lauren...I might have carried forth a little more of the subliminal as Karilea suggests. |
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ecrivan Member Elite
since 2001-12-10
Posts 3923my own state |
Gunslinger, and we are victims to our own volcanic eruptions Marsha, if you get to Italy travel down the boot to the Amalfi coast and Pompeii, you'll enjoy it. |
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