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Greeneyes
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In Your Poetic Mind

0 posted 2002-05-11 01:41 PM




tonight,
  tonight  he
sleeps
somewhere
upper side:
  Manhattan

3 a.m.

green midnights
fresh flowers of
color,
vases in
naked thoughts

yet:

I no longer
have
faith of
feeling him
--
taunting his
salty
lips
for a taste
of redemption
erotic, -- ecstasy

it could
never be enough
to see
his eyelids
close
get lost
there,--
   there
close again
among
nights of love
slipping, shifting, crashing
in forms
ocean waves--
rebirthing my soul

the earth could
tilt
breaking dust
from
mountains;
spreading it  like
wild  fires
pushing clouds
upward to heavens
view

for how

my hands fumble
--this feeling

somewhere--
   somewhere
he is missing me

as parted lips
feel moisture

rain



I Know Why The Caged Bird Sings
Could I have been anyone other than me?
True poems rest between the words


[This message has been edited by Greeneyes (05-12-2002 08:55 PM).]

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Enchantress
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Canada eh.
1 posted 2002-05-11 02:07 PM


Lauren, I absolutely love the turn your writing has taken lately!
So soft and sensual and I really appreciate
the presentation.
This is really wonderful!
~Hugs~

~Somewhere in my heart I'm always
dancing with you in the summer rain~

Sunshine
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Listening to every heart
2 posted 2002-05-11 02:39 PM



What Enchantress said...double dittos....

Janet Marie
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3 posted 2002-05-11 03:32 PM


the earth could
tilt
breaking dust
from
mountains;
spreading it  like
wild fires
pushing clouds
upward to heavens
view

for how

my hands fumble
--this feeling

somewhere--
   somewhere
he is missing me

as parted lips
feel moisture

rain
========================

the pure unadulterated need of this ...is breathtaking...
makes me believe that one could literally "walk on those lips" to be there.
As was said before me...you are taking your poetry to new heights ...which is no small feat considering the level at which you already wrote... and may I say-- it a stunning thing to witness.

When your own emptiness is all thats getting through
There comes a point when youre not sure why youre still talking...
I passed that point long ago

Seymour Tabin
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Tamarac Fla
4 posted 2002-05-11 04:04 PM


Lauren,
An enchanting write, enjoyed the ead.

Gentle Spirit
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since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989

5 posted 2002-05-11 04:57 PM


*smiling* you just keep getting better and better...

Like a red brick,
in a white wall
somebodies brush
forgot to paint...
lonely....(as sung by Tracy Lawrence..)


JamesMichael
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Kapolei, Hawaii, USA
6 posted 2002-05-11 05:08 PM


Soft...yes...sensual...yes...James
Madame Chipmunk
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Michigan
7 posted 2002-05-11 06:54 PM


nights of love
slipping, shifting, crashing
in forms
ocean waves--
rebirthing my soul

beautiful, Lauren

~Mother's Day hugs

Lyra

copyright2002 Lyra Nesius

"poetry is life distilled"  Gwendolyn Brooks

NapalmsConstantlyConfused
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8 posted 2002-05-11 07:24 PM


this is really, really beautiful, and retains the gentle, hallucinatory quality that i have come to recognize as your hallmark. great writing here, Lauren.
-Dave

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9 posted 2002-05-11 07:28 PM




(smiles) YAY!!! Oh Lauren, I just love the way you always write, sweet friend, this is such a soft and sensual treasure that holds firmly to the beauty of human emotions! (kiss on cheek) This is wonderful, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Lauren, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

"Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..."

Shakira

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