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Greeneyes  
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind 
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This is a different twist for me....they are only words.... ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ He spoke of sensual gatherings they shared in their last encounter raw wounds exposing pain Memories: that of burning depths, blackness that circled her mind when he touched her skin or tore his clothes in hurry steps to satisfy himself complete Begging, trying to deny every whisper, flowing over chilled veins, numb, iced, life More then that, I think hate is harsh but she must have felt that somewhere deep inside an untitled heart looking for different horizons, in different scenes, different nights, they were all the same endless complexions, mirrors of faceless tears Maybe too lost, even if a stranger could grant her wishes of penny happiness kissing fountain water over and over peeling each layer slowly I Know Why The Caged Bird Sings Could I have been anyone other than me True poems rest between the words Give hope a chance to float, it will [This message has been edited by Greeneyes (05-11-2002 09:07 AM).] |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
  WOW!!! Oh my gosh, this IS a different twist for you, and I LOVE IT!!! (sigh) This is very hauntingly beautiful, sweet friend, your words always make me smile and are filled with deep imagery and pontification, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Lauren, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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Temptress
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-06-15
Posts 7136Mobile, AL |
Okay. This one almost caused some tears. Loved this! *Jenn* How grave is my condition, for I cannot find the words to say, I need you so. |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
Yr fast becoming a master of the form!  |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
even if a stranger could grant her wishes of penny happiness kissing fountain water over and over peeling each layer slowly ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ WOW Lauren! This is one amazing write! Gawd I love it! ~Hugs~ |
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NapalmsConstantlyConfused
since 2001-05-15
Posts 529 |
you only improve, dear lady. beautiful writing, indeed. -Dave |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
Greeneyes - if they are only words, they are only as you can write... BC |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
they are never just words when in the hands of a gifted poet.... this is hauntingly, heartbreakingly beautiful. Keep stretching the boundries... or to quote a gifted poet..."peel each layer"  When your own emptiness is all thats getting through |
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Honeybee Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-26
Posts 5372Ontario, CANADA |
Lauren, this is your best poem, bar none!  And no, they are not only words, they are a gift and you've blessed us many times with them. Each time I read you, you impress immensely and your growth as a poet is so evident. Bravo, this moved me very much so.Take care, Melissa~ "Poetry is not an opinion expressed... |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
OH YES INDEEDEE... Girl, you are smokin' the pages of Pip with some awesome poetry..... Keep peelin' those layers.... Excellent , yep yep yep... Thanx Lauren |
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Madame Chipmunk Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-05
Posts 8296Michigan |
Intrigingly beautiful, Lauren... ~ Many mirrored hugsLyra |
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Ivy Rose Senior Member
since 2001-12-29
Posts 1300MA, USA |
Greeneyes...This is simply beautiful. Wonder images and wondrous poetic language. ***Ivy Rose |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
You are so visually descriptive Lauren, down to the last detail! They are always just that, WORDS, and you are truly blessed that these are yours. I love the way you write!! [This message has been edited by BluesSerenade (05-11-2002 01:41 AM).] |
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Christopher
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-02
Posts 8296Purgatorial Incarceration |
... i'm glad (such a mild, inadequate word) that they're just "words." i've been on both sides of this pillow fight.. the pain, the loss, the anticipations, expectations, lack of fulfillment, the dark breeze that flows through the discomfort of wondering why... even as you comply. there is a lot of pain, and weak hope in this lauren. i'm touched. |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
Gee Lauren they are "just words" describing some of the most tormenting and also fulfilling of human emotions. This I think is now my favorite of your writings. If this is you just "spurting it out", spurt on, I think you are at a new level in your poetry that is extremely excellent and makes for a compelling read. Loved it can you tell?We should spend less time worrying about when our life is going to end and more on when it's going to start! |
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EternitysHorizon Member
since 2002-05-03
Posts 145Twilight's Orchestra |
I should think no heart in description could ever lie still between the mandatory beats the body spirit brings and it would seem to my unseeing eyes tis all just words Well said with self EH |
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sigheyes Member
since 2001-04-25
Posts 323the winds of destiny |
just words? Just words filled with such meaning and truth. Your words have again touched me Greeneyes. |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
Lauren, you have no idea what type of memories this brings.....this truth in these words.....is so haunting to me..... again your words whisper across my heart dear friend.... Like a red brick, |
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Larry C
since 2001-09-10
Posts 10286United States |
Lauren, And each layer seems ever more insightful... |
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Greeneyes
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
hugssss to all of you....my muse is playing with me lately....love to you all....thank you ever so much for your kind comment.....  Lauren~ I would rather have one breath of his hair, |
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