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Had it Worked Out
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart 
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Had it Worked Out Special moments are memories Gift wrapped by the Magi’s Hands alone Even when paper is next- Morning tattered, and satin ribbons Lay in tangle of thought Special moments can still Make you have faith In magic Was is so many years ago And that young ago For a couple sans income Worried about Christmas, What to gift Each other She, new to the Midwest ~ He thinks her pine eyes Would sparkle on State Street They board a day train To Chicago proper ~ She makes windowpane wishes On casement dressings and Santerrific scenes Wrapped in silken sighs CA bred, frozen crepe Whipped and chilled By Chicago winds Thin legs exposed In crystal shard winds But heart happy As her one wish For snow on State street came, Kissing her eyelashes. Had it worked out It would have remained A Magi story to tell. |
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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
  WOW!!! This is a very interesting and dazzling write, sweet friend, sadly every Christmas in Colorado I wisdh for snow every time yet we have only had it one Christmas in the past five! (sigh) This is wonderful, sweet friend, this sure works out as a keeper, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Karilea, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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Martie
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since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Karilea Image perfect, wonderfully told! IWIHWT!! |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
As her one wish For snow on State street came, Kissing her eyelashes. Had it worked out It would have remained A Magi story to tell. ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ Kari, I wish you could see the look on my face, right now! ~HUGS~ |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
Scenes from the past of a journey to far away....into the cold....of life...and a dream... Beautiful write KJ...very much so...I could see it all.. |
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Nightshade
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
This is magic!! Truly. Chris Life is not measured by breaths you take, but by moments that take your breath away. |
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Bridget Shenachie Senior Member
since 2002-01-23
Posts 1056Kansas USA |
As my mother said--"Life is seldom perfect but it does have it's moments." What a beautiful moment in life! Love you, Karilea. Shenachie |
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Ivy Rose Senior Member
since 2001-12-29
Posts 1300MA, USA |
Sunshine...What a gorgeous story poem!!! I could almost feel and see all that she saw. WONDERFULLY, CAPTIVATING WRITE!!!! |
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Madame Chipmunk Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-05
Posts 8296Michigan |
On casement dressings and Santerrific scenes Wrapped in silken sighs Karilea...I really LOVE the imagery here, its absolutely gorgeous!  ~beautiful silken hugsLyra |
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Duncan Member Ascendant
since 2001-08-07
Posts 5455 |
Had it worked out It would have remained A Magi story to tell. I know exactly what you mean...still, a special moment. The last 2 verses really tied it together for me. |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
dreams still work out at the gym on state street early mornings before coffee at starbucks then they wave at you as they drive by in a benz with dark windows ms shine, you do it baaaad enjoyed it |
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SEA
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
"She makes windowpane wishes" right to the heart of me this went..... |
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EternitysHorizon Member
since 2002-05-03
Posts 145Twilight's Orchestra |
Ruminations of the what ifs always draw the soul to glean pull forth every bit of precious the sky in iife can hold well done EH |
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