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1slick_lady
Member Ascendant

since 2000-12-22

Posts 6088
standing on a shadow's lace

0 posted 2002-05-05 01:01 AM

Immovable

sometimes I sit
on the edge
of my chair
too use to it
I find I do this
unconscientiously unaware
games of musical chairs
placed in
a goldilocks fit
adjusting positions
just to find a comfortable
place to sit
try so hard
to sit straight up
in my seat
then the ground
just moves away
and won’t reach my feet
my stomach stands
in my throat
with a giant knot
and my heart perches
on my shoulder
singing memories I forgot
I yearn to grab the world
and touch it
in many ways
but the wheels
of my chair are locked
into an Emily Dickinson phase

Larry C

Member Patricius

since 2001-09-10

Posts 10286
United States

1 posted 2002-05-05 01:08 AM

Helen,
Are you sure that wasn't a Goldilock's OUT-fit?

Okay...I really liked the structure of this and the concept. Well done.

It's never too late to have a good childhood! Woohoo!

DonFurr
Member

since 2001-01-01

Posts 172
Monticello IN

2 posted 2002-05-05 09:41 PM

Poet is too shallow a word to
convey the compliment you lend it
with your talent.

Read with pleasure by our eyes and
enjoyed with our souls

Mistletoe Angel

Member Empyrean

since 2000-12-17

Posts 32816
Portland, Oregon

3 posted 2002-05-05 10:25 PM

WOW!!! I just love the way you end this, this is soooooo very powerful! (kiss on cheek) My heart goes out to you and I hope everything turns out very soon in the end, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Helen, thank you for sharing!

May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

"Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..."

Shakira

serenity blaze
Member Empyrean

since 2000-02-02

Posts 27738

4 posted 2002-05-05 10:30 PM

I read this one several times too.

You write the words of snapshots to the soul.

Very simple wording, but sharp shooting accuracy!

Applause, Lady Slick.

Sven

Member Laureate

since 1999-11-23

Posts 14937
East Lansing, MI USA

5 posted 2002-05-06 02:50 PM

love the last line helen. . .it makes the poem. . .

great work. . .

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To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world.

Temptress

Moderator

Member Rara Avis

since 1999-06-15

Posts 7136
Mobile, AL

6 posted 2002-05-06 08:00 PM

*sigh*
I love the way you write, Lady.
I love the way you think too.

How grave is my condition, for I cannot find the words to say, I need you so.
~Sarah MacLachlan~

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