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White Unicorn Dream
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White Unicorn Dream |
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ShadowRider Senior Member
since 2001-07-14
Posts 1038USA 
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 ~ White Unicorn Dream ~ only one may seat the horse A palerider of fate sipping his morning cup of storm leaving is always late black rain does not trickle down where it must always mist leaving the grass like tossed salad green-alive and crisp. blurred are crooked backgrounds hooves paw; smoke from snorts a power that sings from galloping veils secrets told in sealed waxy reports He never thought he would forget or lose how to stalk his way back home face to nuzzle, they compare life alibi's haunted are the aloof and the alone He asks each dream, and each time: refused if he knows the right name to say with a heart held firmly held in his hand utters: Love as, finally both,they ride away |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
ShadowRider A unique poem, enjoyed. |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
Nicely done...thank you! |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
Jeff darling boy I could just say something short like this is good writing? Noooooooooooo of course not, because it’s not good writing, it’s stunningly fabulous writing. YOU are a superb writer my friend and this is utterly stunning in its beauty Fabulous writing Absolutely excellent I love the lines and the construction you really have expressed so much in this. Excellent absolutely wonderful Utterly utterly beautiful He asks each dream, and each time: refused if he knows the right name to say with a heart held firmly held in his hand utters: Love as, finally both, they ride away    Love and warm stuff As always Mushy To give light to them that sit in darkness..... to guide our feet into the way of peace Luke 2:79 |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
This does sound very much like a dream...and I enjoyed every line... |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Wonderful Jeff!! Love this one....and I also love unicorns! ~Hugs~ ~Somewhere in my heart I'm always |
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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
  (smiles) Oh Jeff, this is sooooooo beautifully breathtaking, sweet friend, I too envisioned the drea reading this, as this swept me off the feet and had me riding, carried off by His love! (big hugggsssssss) God Bless You, sweet friend, this is a true poem of infinite grace, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Jeff, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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Ivy Rose Senior Member
since 2001-12-29
Posts 1300MA, USA |
ShadowRider...Very unique and inspired poem. I like the transitions in this poem. ***Ivy Rose |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
You captured my attention with the unicorn title, and kept it with a magical flow of words and thoughts. Love, a magic potion. |
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Magicmystery Senior Member
since 2002-02-13
Posts 821Windsor, Ontario, Canada |
I like how you wrote this. Your images are crystal and potent. Soulmates are they, the equine and the rider. It is a beautiful story. Sherry Cherish the good memories past and look forward to the adventure called Tomorrow. But above all... be kind to yourself today. [This message has been edited by Magicmystery (05-05-2002 02:59 AM).] |
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ShadowRider Senior Member
since 2001-07-14
Posts 1038USA |
Master Seymour: Thanks guy, for the time in reading and your most generous reply! Magnus: from one old-school romantic poet to another, it's the only way to be, don't you think? Thankx, Magnus. Maaaaaaaaa-Shhhhhhhhhaa: How's my Brit friend these days? **smile** Even though it seemed a simple topic, it had more than one thought process going on. As usual, huh? hehehe You are the kindest dearest Lady. Thankx is never enuff. Say hi to Kriss, please, for all of us here at Shadow-Central. Sunshine: delightful of YOU to give your atta-boy to this humble poem. That was sweet. . .thank you! May peace and love always be in your heart's hearth. ShadowRider Thankx, Y'all!! |
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ShadowRider Senior Member
since 2001-07-14
Posts 1038USA |
Morning Nance! How are you this fine fine day? Unicorn's symbolize many things to me: the loss of mystery, the gain of legends, the majesty of mythical power and of dreams. Don't know what I would do without your words, Nance. ~huuugg~ Noah, your words in reply exceed the poetry of the poem itself, Ami. **smile** But yes, you hit on the idea: that the unicorn was the method of carrying away the sweet dreams to be lived together. You are compassionate AND clever. Ivy Rose: a perfect blend of names that I owe a favor to for replying so warmly. Thank you so much, Ivy. MidniteSun-Lady: hi kiddo! que pasa out 'dere in Alaska land. Love, in a purest sense, IS magical. Indeed it is! Hope you are doing well, and many thanks to you, sweet friend. MagicMystery: what a special treat it is to see your words here. I TRY to write even romantic pieces with a flavour of power words. Just my nature I guess. Never been known to tread without breaking the grass blades. hehehe HAVE been known to make people slap their haids and say: What in the Sam Hill is he talking about!? Pleased you enjoyed this, tho! May love and peace always stay warmed in your heart's hearth. Thanksx Y'all! Jeff |
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Dulcinea Senior Member
since 2001-07-22
Posts 774IN |
Bumpages... Besides, I had to tell you how magical and special this poem is...but then, you know that.  |
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Madame Chipmunk Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-05
Posts 8296Michigan |
sipping his morning cup of storm I especially loved this line, Jeff...but the whole poem is filled with wonderful imagination.  ~Unicorn hugsLyra |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
That made me think of the Last Unicorn for some reason, and then it makes me think how I even remember that... Enjoyed. |
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