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ShadowRider
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since 2001-07-14

Posts 1038
USA

0 posted 2002-05-02 11:32 PM

          Wronged or Righteous

     He stands at the hill's pinnacle
     no man has ever wanted to look over his life from there
     the cap of gloom bumping thunder above him
     strobe-flashed, his face marrow white and pale
     strained with a decision he cannot make

     on a torchlight's tip, tantalizing frozen
     phased time lost; a song without meter
     plays without a listener

     the waiting
     lonely
     with hands outstretched searching grace
     the din of his soul's siege immeasurably loud

     two years ago in a drunken swirling cacophony
     bumper met flesh, and flesh died without prayer
     one man stayed
     one man fled into the shelter of cowardice

     the passenger now awaits sentencing
     while the driver trembles  on Pilate's Mount
     he bleeds from a wound-loss not yet opened
     his mind splintered in sacrificial bewilderment

     The Mount is his to inhabit: he created it
     Friendship meted from melted mascara clear tears
     He can face his mistake
                or he can't

     He waits for the matchless storm to abate
     his heart opens

     he comes down . . .
and meets himself

Mistletoe Angel

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since 2000-12-17

Posts 32816
Portland, Oregon

1 posted 2002-05-02 11:37 PM

(big hugggsssssss) Oh Jeff, this is so very wonderfully said, sweet friend, I'm not sure if I got the entire meaning of this poem, but it seemed to me that we all inflict wounds, and to make rights of all these wrongs we create, we must look deep down inside of ourselves and examine ourselves sincerely and admit our own faults and lusten to make better again! (sigh) This is excellent, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Jeff, thank you for sharing!

May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

"Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..."

Shakira

ShadowRider
Senior Member

since 2001-07-14

Posts 1038
USA

2 posted 2002-05-02 11:42 PM

i think you have the gist of it, Noah.
Sort of a story of choices
between doing what's right
even if it means sacrifice.
a hypothetical situation of two friends;
one taking the 'rap' for the other,
and the 2nd having to make a decision.

sorry for the headache....i keep a year's supply here
just for friends who read these kinds of poems....*s*
Thankx Noah-Dude! Seriously grateful for your insightful interp!
my best, always,
jeff

Marsha

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-07-10

Posts 7423
Maidstone Kent England

3 posted 2002-05-03 09:00 AM

Jeff darling heart OH MY firstly this is what I was talking about, it’s utterly utterly breathtaking in its power. YOUR writing is utterly utterly beautiful, and awesome. The insight in with which this has been written is incredible, choices, always choices, with all have them, but not all of us listen to our hearts when making them. You as you always do write with power and depth. Without fear or favour you clearly and most beautifully inscribe words of wisdom. I am awed seriously by your ability darling boy. YOU leave me speechless with admiration for the way this is written.

YOU do know I love your writing don’t you? Of course, that is why I always look for your writing. Excellent work darling boy excellent

BTW say hi to Dulcie and Batman for me and give them both a hug x x

Love and warm stuff
As always
Mushy

To give light to them that sit in darkness..... to guide our feet into the way of peace Luke 2:79

Enchantress
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since 2001-08-14

Posts 35113
Canada eh.

4 posted 2002-05-03 09:07 AM

Jeff, I love poetry that makes me think...
as this one does.
I shall therefore say 'well done',
pop it into my library and at a quiet time during my day,
take it out again and savour every word.
~Hugs~

~Somewhere in my heart I'm always
dancing with you in the summer rain~

ShadowRider
Senior Member

since 2001-07-14

Posts 1038
USA

5 posted 2002-05-03 08:31 PM

postponing the inevitable righteousness, but one can never avoid it totally.
I am humbled that you are reading this, and willing to dissect the
analogies, metaphors.  They each have both a spiritual meaning,
and a storyline meaning.  It's hard to write a metaphor that can be
both.  That's why Dulcy calls them headache poems.
None of that 'moon in june' love glove, dove above stuff.  hahaha

You both are special friends, and are the main reason i stay here at Passions.
Wonderful wonderful people, both of you.
Thanks.
jeff

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