Open Poetry #20 |
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heavy iron love |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast ![]() |
you were flowers growing in sky meadows there were no clouds or wind I was there with my eyes and didn't leave prints with touch feet I made you poems from twigs and string you tied them in your hair and whispered little girl sounds with your laughing eye mouth you sang to me when we ate berries and carved our initials there on my back skin with your wet finger knife we made heart shapes with our breath and linked them into each other we said kisses would them metal and they could never float away and we kissed until they were heavy iron love ©dark |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
you tied them in your hair and whispered little girl sounds with your laughing eye mouth and just by this verse alone, I can tell...you know the arts of love. smiling |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
ms serene...thank you ms....would always do my best over and over until it was perfect.. |
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Mistletoe Angel![]() ![]() ![]()
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
![]() ![]() ![]() (smiles) Awwwwwww, I love both the innocent and passionate feel of this poem, sweet friend, this is a wonderful meadow serenade! (big hugggssssss) May true love always fill your heart with a faith that be cast with iron, sweet friend, we all love you so much, this is fabulous! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet friend, thank you for sharing! ![]() May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Dang! This is incredible. ...and good morning to you too Dark. ~sighs, Nancy~ ~Somewhere in my heart I'm always |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Dark Stranger Your moans have over tones, enjoyed |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
Noah, thank you my friend Nancy, slow hugs for your sweet words Sy, bless you amigo, I appreciate you |
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SEA![]() ![]()
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
"we made heart shapes with our breath and linked them into each other" I think that is so completely COOL! wow, love the image that brings.... ![]() |
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Nightshade![]() ![]() ![]() ![]()
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
and carved our initials there on my back skin with your wet finger knife Dark Stranger...well now, I think I might be without words at the moment...maybe not....WOW!!! Chris ![]() Life is not measured by breaths you take, but by moments that take your breath away. |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
DS "we made heart shapes with our breath and linked them into each other we said kisses would them metal and they could never float away and we kissed until they were heavy iron love" Such a wonderful thought! |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
SEA...thanks babe..have missed you Nightshade, wink, just picking the right words perhaps? Thank you so much ms Ms Martie, thanks lil friend for your lady eyes [This message has been edited by Dark Stranger (05-02-2002 10:30 AM).] |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
some lovely blends of images here D... M |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
This touches to a depth only mermen know this, sir, is a spectacular write, and a Keeper of the first sort... Karilea |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
NT, thanks maureen, pleased that you enjoyed it. Sunshine, Good Morning, and yes there is a story about me breathing underwater in another life...thanks lady.. |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
When you are ready you will relate it poetic or prose will do fine |
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bsquirrel![]()
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
Enjoyed. |
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Indigo Senior Member
since 2001-05-17
Posts 602 |
pressed for time they steamed love's fabric smooth till one of them, smiling wickedly, wrinkled it up again Indigo |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
BSQ, thanks my friend Indigo, they say if it stays wet it won't wrinkle supposed to apply to most any fabric thanks babe |
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catalinamoon![]()
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
Sinfully sensuous. Sandra |
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SmittenKitten Senior Member
since 2001-06-20
Posts 1131where the sky and horizon meet |
you tied them in your hair and whispered little girl sounds with your laughing eye mouth" pebbles tumble a giggle as we tickle them with our toes the sunlight dances in our eyes as we touch nose to nose I love the scenery you evoke and how you integrate it into your characters...you are one cool guy DS ![]() *hugs* ~Krista ![]() Your beautiful words & creativity allow me to connect with the same in myself. |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
You are an artist Ds, mind if I smile..... Like a red brick, |
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Marge Tindal![]() ![]() ![]() ![]()
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
DarkStranger~ Word-silk, woven into it's finest bartering fabric~ Sheer pleasure~ *Hugs* ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
Love is the berries, when it's done right! I liked the soft and hard combination in this! Nice touch DS~ |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
Sandra, thank you so much ms catmoon SmittyKitty, slow hugs for your sweet touch Donna, bless your eyes lady friend Marge, thank you lovely poetess Bluez, so berry nice of you to visit and sweeten up things thank you |
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rwood Member Elite
since 2000-02-29
Posts 3793Tennessee |
Dark, honey...i believe you are heavy iron love... And you just get better. Sincerely, Reg |
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Chelsea~ Member
since 2001-02-09
Posts 260Ontario, CANADA |
Dark Stranger, This beauty flows like silk. I'm amazed with your unique expression, you are one talented poet! ![]() |
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Elan Member
since 2002-05-03
Posts 382State of Wide Eye |
quote: Thank you... |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
The only sinful situation is that we can't all buy a book containing such diamonds as this one. You really should reconsider, it's a loss for the world if it does not get to enjoy your poetry and ... you! I do hope you have this material in some safe place! ... we, the girls, could ask for the services of ... Arsène Lupin, if you would not listen! Amazing poetic talent! Love, Margherita ![]() |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
thank you ms mar...you smile me |
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