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She’ll Be Fine
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She’ll Be Fine |
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EagleOne Member Elite
since 2000-03-07
Posts 2829Between a laugh and a tear... 
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She’ll Be Fine Hey there son! What’s the story here? Sitting in the gutter, grinin’ ear to ear Don’t sweat it friend, she’ll be fine I won’t stay long in this fine shrine Hey now don’t you know this ain’t the place be Ya better move along before somebody sees Hey there friend I see it’s time to go, and soon enough I’ll be on my way Down along the road I’ll go and find a place to stay Hey! I think that I remember now, there maybe was an age When I’d seen you prancing high, up upon your stage Ya know my memory’s gone from too much wine It really was so long ago, the visions now sublime Ya know I can’t recall the fall from grace That left half a man, laying here in disgrace Can’t say I’m sure about the fall All I really know is that I hit the wall Well I’ll stay on the rails, avoid the strife Gotta feed the kids, and then ya know there is the wife Now I think may be the time to dance You can truly make it, if you dare to take the chance Well remember this, one day we’ll come to see You can speak here for yourself but surely not for me When it finally comes to pass we’ll all know the fear And then we’ll all pay the price as we shed our tears Hey, off you go with your words of covered true There’s one thing I know for sure, I’ll never be like you Well I’ll let ya know there’s worse my friend And tell you that we’re all the same when we reach the end |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
Eddie darling boy as always you write with such skill and wonderment this is excellent writing from you. Exquisite flow and the rhyme are utterly utterly spectacular This poem contains some amazingly beautiful lines, the form is utterly utterly divine, and I love it I truly do. Utterly utterly utterly perfect Love and warm stuff As always Mushy    To give light to them that sit in darkness..... to guide our feet into the way of peace Luke 2:79 |
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Sunnyone Member Ascendant
since 2000-07-06
Posts 5334Staffordshire, England |
this is a song, you know.......it sings out to me, and belongs up there with the likes of master poets like Dylan and Neil Young. I read it about 5 times, and still kept hearing those guys sing it.......loved it, and ready for more more more!! The music is playing...the dance begins |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
This is a great format! Highly effective construction, and the conversational style just hit this one out of the ball park. It reminded me a bit of shrugging at the absurdity of one's own life. Intriguing and very well done!  |
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Mother_Earth Senior Member
since 2000-11-20
Posts 13701/2 year Texas & 1/2 year Michigan |
Eagle One, this is great. I love the different word pictures you made. Thanks for sharing, ME |
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Dee Member Elite
since 2000-08-19
Posts 2330Queensland, Australia |
Eddie, sometimes the depth of your writing is beyond me  but as always it intrigues me.Dee Stand straight and tall, not the reflection as others see you, but as you truely are. Clearwater |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Eddie, this is an incredible write! Enjoyed the read so much tonight... LOVE the presentation. ~Hugs~ ~Somewhere in my heart I'm always |
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EagleOne Member Elite
since 2000-03-07
Posts 2829Between a laugh and a tear... |
Marsha ~ Your words do cause me great embarrassment, but I do thank you! Sunnyone ~ Yes, it is indeed a song, well it was intended that way, thank you! Serenity ~ “the absurdity of one's own life” yep that’s me! lol I thank you, I always appreciate your thoughts. M E ~ Thank you for stopping by, ‘tis good to see you again! Dee ~ It’s always beyond me! lol take care! Nancy ~ Glad you enjoyed , take care!We are all just prisoners here of our own device ~ Hotel California, The Eagles |
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Lady Ollyne Member
since 2001-01-08
Posts 337East Coast |
There are mighty men that have fallen before and 'tis a surety shall happen again but when one brave knight can show this skill, his words shall rise in music's pen. Wonderfully Scribed Lady Ollyne "O, learn to read what silent love hath writ: |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
And your bottom line is for sure the bottom line Very well presented, in thought and verse I liked this one lots and lots Liz |
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EagleOne Member Elite
since 2000-03-07
Posts 2829Between a laugh and a tear... |
Lady Ollyne ~ I thank thee dear lady! Elizabeth ~ It is an honor to have your thoughts, thank you! We are all just prisoners here of our own device ~ Hotel California, The Eagles |
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Interloper
since 2000-11-06
Posts 8369Deep in the heart |
Well done |
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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 BRAVO!!! Oh Eddie, this is wonderful, sweet friend, I love the structure of this and how you set up the two people having their philosophical conversation! (big hugggsssss) This is fabulous, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Eddie, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
You sing this so well Eddie ...well done my friend |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Eddie I felt like you were two different parts of yourself...maybe one from the past, or one more hidden. A very intriguing write! |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
Do I see a poet stretching his wings Great to see you exploring all those poetic roads my dear friend~AW Hugs and BF Kisses! |
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EagleOne Member Elite
since 2000-03-07
Posts 2829Between a laugh and a tear... |
Interloper ~ Thank you! Noah ~ always good to know you enjoyed, thank you! Paula ~ so good to see you again my friend, thank you for stopping by. Martie ~ Always you see behind the words, I thank you. Butterfly ~ Today is indeed a good day, so good to see you dear friend. As you know there are many roads to be explored and I just have to have a look down all of them. Thank you dear lady, take care! |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
Of course she will be just fine, in time....but I gotta say there are no finer words than the truth you wrote in this!! Loved it, especially the part about hitting the wall and how you bounced off it. |
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EagleOne Member Elite
since 2000-03-07
Posts 2829Between a laugh and a tear... |
BluesSerenade ~ well I know about hitting that wall! Thanks for adding your thoughts, take care!We are all just prisoners here of our own device ~ Hotel California, The Eagles |
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