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Aenimal
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-11-18

Posts 7350
the ass-end of space

0 posted 2003-02-16 12:01 PM

She haunts me still
I feel the press
of flesh to bone

The cold metal
of curved scythe
against neck exposed

Submissive

To suffer a slow death
again and again

Regret
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(That moment in time you can never have back or leave behind)

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ecrivan
Member Elite

since 2001-12-10

Posts 3923
my own state

1 posted 2003-02-16 01:42 AM

regret does eat away at our reserves..nicely expressed

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SEA

Moderator

Member Seraphic

since 2000-01-18

Posts 22676
with you

2 posted 2003-02-16 03:06 AM

I know this

in rhythm with my own ache....

passing shadows
Member Empyrean

since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
displaced

3 posted 2003-02-16 03:10 AM

I don't even have words

Kethry
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-07-29

Posts 9082
Victoria Australia

4 posted 2003-02-16 06:24 AM

Regret, the sword of Damacles that hangs over most of us at one time or another. Well done.
Kethry

Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind. Unknown

inkedgoddess
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-11-19

Posts 7392
Ohio

5 posted 2003-02-16 08:10 AM

most of us humans have one of these too, raffie,
very well portrayed by your wordweaving,as usual

abbe
Member

since 2003-01-20

Posts 131
michigan, usa

6 posted 2003-02-16 08:33 AM

well said.

very well said.

Jason Lyle
Senior Member

since 2003-02-07

Posts 1438
With my darkling

7 posted 2003-02-16 11:20 AM

Regret is a cancer, and an exercise in futility.I love your work.
Jason

Cpat Hair

Member Patricius

since 2001-06-05

Posts 11793

8 posted 2003-02-16 01:53 PM

nice work Raph...captures the feel and the idea with just a few well chosen words.... I enjoyed

Aenimal
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-11-18

Posts 7350
the ass-end of space

9 posted 2003-02-16 02:03 PM

Thank you ecrivan and oh how it does

Thanks Susan and thanks for the email

Dixie those will do, much appreciated

Kethry thank you and love the reference

Mish I know we all do

Thanks abbe, very kind

Jason I appreciate the compliment

Cpat glad you enjoyed

Greeneyes

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-09-09

Posts 9903
In Your Poetic Mind

10 posted 2003-02-16 03:46 PM

the haunt, and ache even in regrets, does feel like metal pressing.....well felt....

Lauren~

I sing to life
To it's tragic beauty
To pain and strife
Let all that dances through me
The rise and the fall, I lived through it all

passing shadows
Member Empyrean

since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
displaced

11 posted 2003-02-20 04:44 AM

GG
Member Elite

since 2002-12-03

Posts 3532
Lost in thought

12 posted 2003-02-20 05:33 AM

ahh ack... you're good with expressing the real pain that circumstances or words cause.

Always, Alyssa

- And so it was that time stood still -
(blink, breathe, stand, fight)

Aenimal
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-11-18

Posts 7350
the ass-end of space

13 posted 2003-02-20 08:48 AM

Thanks Lauren, Dixie and Alyssa. Have a knack for darkness.

Justbleu
Member Elite

since 1999-08-31

Posts 3329
Oregon, Originally From Alaska :)

14 posted 2003-03-31 10:08 PM

Regret eats away at your very core....Nasty stuff it is!!!! Good write!!!!
Bridgette

"Somewhere, somehow, it should be possible to touch someone and never let go again. To hold someone, not for a moment but forever." Unknown

Earth Angel
Member Empyrean

since 2002-08-27

Posts 40215
Realms of Light

15 posted 2003-03-31 10:17 PM

You write so well of these sorrowful states.
Really grabs the reader in the solar plexus and does a slow, wrenching turn...

Warm hugs,
EA

Aenimal
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-11-18

Posts 7350
the ass-end of space

16 posted 2003-04-01 12:46 PM

Thanks bridgette and Thanks Linda..yeah you know me master of darkness

littlewing
Member Rara Avis

since 2003-03-02

Posts 9655
New York

17 posted 2003-04-01 01:08 PM

Raph - I loved this the first time I read it - just keeps getting better :

(That moment in time you can never have back or leave behind)

so very true - so very true - amazing as always . . . xxoo

Honeybee
Member Ascendant

since 1999-12-26

Posts 5372
Ontario, CANADA

18 posted 2003-04-21 12:15 PM

These last few years regret and I have become all too well acquainted....you've left me with that proverbial lump in throat. You write pain...life beautifully.

Melissa~

Intellectually I know that Canada is no better than any other country. Emotionally I KNOW that Canada is the best country in the world!

Gina Culliney
Member

since 2003-03-08

Posts 170

19 posted 2003-04-23 09:58 PM

hauntingly lyrical, well done.

Wind

Member Elite

since 2002-10-12

Posts 2981

20 posted 2003-04-26 08:29 PM

Hi, Ralph, your poem was haunting. It reminded me of my own fears...we all have that feeling sometimes. It's nice to read your poetry again

Never be normal!

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