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The Face of Goodbye
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The Face of Goodbye |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
the face of goodbye downturned streaked with wet pain chillingly no one sees the aloneness in her eyes no more passion only the silent detachment falling again the eyes will never smile the heart will never break the girl will never feel again |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
uuuuuuuuuuugghhhhhhhh this aches, you realize you can change the she to he and know that i understand. Post more damn you! |
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regards2you Member Elite
since 2002-10-01
Posts 3940California |
Very realistic! Enjoyed, Pat  ..without surrender, be on good terms with all persons.. |
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vlraynes Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229Somewhere... out there... |
Ouch...I felt the ache in this, Sharon. Nicely done. Hugs,  ~Vicky "...until you have read the verse on his heart, |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
Write my smile through your tears why don't you! Oh, but can we ever stop feeling, and would we really want to? Love forsakes but it shall not cross our heart forever! I hear you even if I don't want to. Hang in there PDV~ and smile pretty please~ |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
you have captured the essence of the goodbye so well... My regards to you, sudhir |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
damn, that's depressing |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
Never is such a long time... This is quite a vividly emotional write, PdV.. Well done... |
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scorpio Member Ascendant
since 2002-10-02
Posts 5178right...there |
A very long time..."never" is... believe in what your heart feels... |
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Thomas119gold Senior Member
since 2002-06-03
Posts 708Biloxi, MS (city by the sea) |
Sad is my heart as made by you with this poetry so blue. very nice write I can feel my emotions change as I read this poem Thomas |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Poet deVine Always enjoy reading you. |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
enjoyed |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
BS.... the premise is BS...  may feel that way sometimes...but no.. not unless we die do we stop feeling... we can bury it, cover it up..layer it... build walls around it.. the whole lot... but it is there..and when we learn to look up.. we know it... and we know the pains that go with it.... you can kick me later... you now owe me one. |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (big hugggsssssss) Oh Sharon, this is so very heartaching, sweet friend, we have to keep feeling as though we may be anesthetized, doesn't mean we are out of life! (sad sigh) I too can sympathize with these petrifying predicates, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Sharon, thank you for sharing! May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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Fred Hobbs Member
since 1999-06-08
Posts 329Tallahassee, Florida, US |
Gosh Sharon, people love you more than just about anyone else! |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
As I began reading your sad poem, a tear welled in my eye. As I came to the end of the poem, that tear slid down my cheek.... ~ May the sun dry up any tears that may fall from your seeing eyes... Warm hugs, EA |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
"My smile belies my pain My humor disguises the shame" I feel you... Susan |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Thank you all for reading...I blush to admit where this inspiration came from...so I won't tell you because it's so mundane! |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
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Fauxreal Junior Member
since 2003-02-16
Posts 38 |
This spoke right to my heart.  |
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Skyfire
since 2000-12-27
Posts 3381Riding |
*sighs* beautiful write PdV. This one got me... well done Sometimes you find a friend where once there wasn't one. Sometimes you find a love where once there was a friend. |
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Wind
since 2002-10-12
Posts 2981 |
You are definately one of my favorites. You know that don't you? this goes into my library. the Wind is invisible. |
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ThisDiamond Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353Michigan, USA |
You know, this poet is aptly named... a veteran of the heart write... Hugs to you my friend. TD |
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wranx Member Elite
since 2002-06-07
Posts 3689Moved from a shack to a barn |
Aw, c'mon Sharon. Now, look at what you've done! You made the Earth Angel cry! Sheesh. Liked the poem though, glad yer writin'. Ed [This message has been edited by wranx (03-02-2003 03:32 PM).] |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
This is pretty sad Sharon and such a great write. good to read more of you Maree. |
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