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The Old Willow (senryu)
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The Old Willow (senryu) |
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INclan Senior Member
since 1999-07-20
Posts 1024Indiana, USA |
caressed by raindrops the old willow combs her hair and bows to the wind |
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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (smiles) Awwwwwww, I love this, sweet friend, wepping willows are one of my absolute favorite trees and I just love in spring when they bud and sway with the wind! (big hugggssss) Every day has its way, even weeping willows weep in joy many days, God Bless You, this would be perfect for Reflections, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet friend, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Very nicely done... if I may... I know where you are, when the Old willows curtsey. ~Hugs, Nancy~ ~ Trace my body with your words.. |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Love the imagery! This is a little piece of perfection! Truly! Warm hugs, Earth Angel |
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Charisma
since 2000-09-30
Posts 5906lost in blue pages |
Beautiful......  Charisma |
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Krawdad Member Elite
since 2001-01-03
Posts 2597 |
i like this but may i offer another version? caressed by raindrops weeping willow combs her hair and bows to the wind |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
InClan~ Nobody .... but nobody does it better~ So nice to see you~ *Huglets* ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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INclan Senior Member
since 1999-07-20
Posts 1024Indiana, USA |
Thank you all for stopping by. Noah, you are such a flirt. Nancy and Krawdad, Your suggestions are very welcome. I was picturing an old bent willow tree near my previous home in Lafayette, IN. Since this is a Japanese form, my thoughts moved to a long black haired Japanese lady bowing to comb out her hair....the rest took care of itself. Marge, I have read and respected so much of your work that your praise humbles me. INclan |
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kaile
since 2000-02-06
Posts 5146singapore |
i dig the personification here... |
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regards2you Member Elite
since 2002-10-01
Posts 3940California |
This is simple beauty. Enjoyed greatly. Pat ..without surrender, be on good terms with all persons.. |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
INclan Good one, enjoyed. |
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VAS Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450Oregon |
*EXCELLENT*   Whether on the shoal or on the shore, |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
BRAVO! |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Sir... wonderful. |
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Joannak Member
since 2000-03-11
Posts 121Indiana, USA |
INclan, you are a master of description in few words. I very much liked this one, and I hope we will be seeing more on a regular basis. Missed you here. Joanna What better way to become immortal than to wake up each day and write? Ray Bradbury |
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