Open Poetry #25 |
Lady Knight |
KoKo Senior Member
since 2003-02-15
Posts 995Inside the shadow's shadow |
The night is ever glowing Ever growing Ever sewing It weaves into your lust Smoothly like thick, dripping honey Slickly like the running rain Sneakily like a garden snake Quietly, she creeps She seeps She weeps She is walking with your blood, like Mane walks with lion Map walks with traveler Mandarin bud walks with fruit. Silently, she roars She soars Deplores She is yours. You are hers. You are her broken slurs. I do not know whether I was then a man dreaming I was a butterfly, or whether I am now a butterfly dreaming I am a man. |
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Darksoul Member
since 2003-01-31
Posts 61 |
Beautifully written! |
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the_loner_23 Member Ascendant
since 2002-06-08
Posts 5479Jacksonville, Florida, USA |
I really enjoyed this a lot. Cold hands means a warm heart |
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KoKo Senior Member
since 2003-02-15
Posts 995Inside the shadow's shadow |
Thank you much, Darksoul and loner! I do not know whether I was then a man dreaming I was a butterfly, or whether I am now a butterfly dreaming I am a man. |
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Albert J. Allie Senior Member
since 2003-02-13
Posts 512Queens NY |
KoKo Bravo!! I eagerly await your work now. |
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KoKo Senior Member
since 2003-02-15
Posts 995Inside the shadow's shadow |
Albert, Thank you. I quite enjoy your peices, too!! I do not know whether I was then a man dreaming I was a butterfly, or whether I am now a butterfly dreaming I am a man. |
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GG Member Elite
since 2002-12-03
Posts 3532Lost in thought |
smooth and chilling, I enjoyed it! Always, Alyssa - And so it was that time stood still - |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Very well done! ~ Trace my body with your words.. |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
(smiles) Oh Lauren, this is exquisite, sweet friend, I absolutely love this! (big hugggssssss) You have the spirit of the chivalrous times in you, sweet friend, you have my knightly vote, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Lauren, thank you for sharing! May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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Connel
since 2002-11-04
Posts 736Florida, USA |
Ahhhh.. Lovley!! Anyone can write, But only poets can capture the heart. |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
Very nice entry indeed, good luck! |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
A very good book submission...I enjoyed... "Love makes the world go around" |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
great last lines! what a write! |
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Sunnyone Member Ascendant
since 2000-07-06
Posts 5334Staffordshire, England |
The box is ticked, and I think this would make a great poem for our book!!!!!! Wonderful, and sensuous... Accept these small gifts from my gypsy soul, and let the magik happen! ~~S~~ |
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KoKo Senior Member
since 2003-02-15
Posts 995Inside the shadow's shadow |
Thank you all SO so much! Your kind words mean much to me, as my inspiration is seemingly low for a peice I am trully proud of. Hugs to you all!! You're all such a wonderful bunch of people! I do not know whether I was then a man dreaming I was a butterfly, or whether I am now a butterfly dreaming I am a man. |
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Angel Senior Member
since 1999-07-02
Posts 551Pennsylvania |
Simply wonderful . |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
A chilling and interesting write. Maree |
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carol Senior Member
since 2003-01-25
Posts 624Florida USA |
Real friends celebrate in who we are and have faith in all that we can become |
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