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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass 
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Back To Back Icoveryoucoverme Under this kaleidoscope of crows and clouds, back to back in a blather of winter sticks and weeds, this field in which we are alone. Icoveryoucoverme Your voice almost a comfort, back to back, wind jerking at the words as we stand trading our faces for a thread of safety and a little warmth. Icoveryoucoverme You see the darkness at the treeline, back to back, I see dark, treeline, sticks and weeds, your voice, the jerking wind, the words, the crows, clouds. Icoveryoucoverme If we could run, could each run back to back, two parting hemispheres toward the treeline and what between? Move closer at the thought. Icoveryoucoverme Twin shells, a single nameless formless creature holding back to back in this field, this winter sticks and weeds jerking wind kaleidoscope of crows and clouds. |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Ed...An amazing poem! |
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regards2you Member Elite
since 2002-10-01
Posts 3940California |
Ed, OMGosh! This is so creative, I just re-read for the fun and pleasure and magnificence of it. I don't want to take away from the awesomeness of this poem, but can't help but comment how much I love the word: "blather".... Enjoy this greatly, such talent!' Hugs, Pat  ..without surrender, be on good terms with all persons.. |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
and what between? Move closer at the thought. ~*~ Questions within questions... I like the idea of this, I like the sound of this. I would enjoy hearing you read this aloud. |
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garysgirl 
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Me too, Karilea.... I'll bet you have a very strong reading voice, with a poetic touch of your pronunciation of words.......  Oh, and I had to read this over again, too....just because.... Hugs, Ethel |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
wonderful read! |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Icoveryoucoverme.... what a wonderful feeling those words running together gave this reader! I love this!! Therefore I'm keeping it. ~Smiles, & Hugs, Nancy~ ~ Trace my body with your words.. |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Ratleader Well done, enjoyed the read. |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
Hi folks -- this one's a bit of a departure for me. I was a bit afraid folks wouldn't like it, so it's something of a relief to hear that you did. Yeah, garysgirl, I do love to read stuff, feel my voice come back at me off the far wall of the room..... Bass voices tend to be a little soft, but I can project just fine.... ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
very nice Ed... the imagery and idea well presented... yes... one for voice not just the mind to hear... good stuff.. |
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Martie
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since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
library addition |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (smiles) Oh Ed, I just love your style, sweet friend, this just comes together so well and the crows and clouds swirled as you spun back to back! (big hugggssssss) This is truly a dizzying charmer, sweet friend, I love it, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Ed, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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Dr.Moose1 Member Elite
since 1999-09-05
Posts 3448Bewilderment , USA |
Ratleader, Good stuff. You've a rather unique perspective that catches the ear as well as the eye. I will follow for a time. Doc |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
See, fellas? I told ye I wouldn't go soft..... Yo, Doc -- coming from you that's praise indeed. Hi, MA -- glad you liked it. It's a different kind of beauty than you like to show, but everything's a picture show in this world. ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
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Martie
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since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Hi Ed I was looking around in my library and read this poem again and wanted to tell you again how much I like it!!  |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Back in the days when this was first posted, I was literally left speechless by your talent... so in awe of your words that I lacked coherent syllables. I was a cat in the presence of a king... peeking from a safe corner... purring at poetic perfection. But silence, however awe-inspired, gives nothing back to the poet... I apologize for those days of taking, absorbing... I didn't even whisper thanks. *S* I whisper it now as your words transport me again... this is magnificent! |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
Dear lady, I wish you'd known how very much I value comments on my work...sometimes they're the only thing that keeps me going, and even when they're not I read every response with eagle eyes, looking for hints that will help me make my writing better. ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Ed~ I doubt it could get a heck of a lot 'better' than this .. but, knowing you, undoubtedly it will (and has)~ BEAUTY ... soft, soft beauty~ *Huglets* ~*Marge*~ ~*The sound of a kiss is not as strong as that of a cannon, but it's echo endures much longer*~ |
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