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Mirror Finish
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Mirror Finish |
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D.Lester Young Senior Member
since 2001-12-08
Posts 1219Austin, Tx |
A stone rippled smooth With a mirror finish Polished from years of abuse Yet hiding an opposite side Resisting change in darkness A boulder in the face of onslaughts Sandblasted from jagged edges A rough cut of what it was Still resisting the winds of change But dislodged it will show Its rough side of determination In molten rock All boundaries have been lost Moisture determining its new form With a crust it again resists change As the tides crash into it Carving out its initials So a diamond in earth’s womb Precious in its unflawed form So crystal clear, having no impurity Dislodged to the surface From a million year sleep In a precision cut a jeweler will do What nature dared not Putting a mirror finish on all sides Thought: Writing is a rough cut of life being polished by years of experience but the flaws will never let you finish typing. D.Lester Young 2/23/2003 Tuscaloosa, AL Copyright © D.Lester Young (White Eagle poetry) [This message has been edited by D.Lester Young (02-23-2003 04:08 PM).] |
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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (smiles) Oh David, this is wonderful, sweet friend, and as you continue to post your wonderful poetry we will all get to see a different side of you as the diamond in your heart continues to polish up! (big hugggsssss) God Bless You, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet David, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
The more pressure that is exerted on a piece of coal, the more precious the diamond! I appreciate the moral behind the story! Warm hugs, Linda |
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Minister Joe Member
since 2003-02-22
Posts 78TX, USA |
D., Certainly the scars of struggle and determination are those evidences in a certain kind of light--to be proud of--because it shows where you've been, to get to where you are. Nature, ultimately is the best mirror for man, and his struggles--the daily dramas reply themselves thousands of times over each day--in different scenarios. The vehicle for your imagery... stone, rock, molten lava coming out of the sea--all indicate a sense of permanence, yet capable of change and transformation. In a precision cut a jeweler will do What nature dared not Putting a mirror finish on all sides This part of your last strophe, the jeweler takes away all evidences of struggle, by polishing and cutting what took thousands of years to form... and in it's own rights, naturally is beautiful. The "mirror polish" is beautiful to look at--but in the end, does it hold the same depth, as the one just pulled from the earth? A wonderful poem--with complex and vivid imagery. I've voted for this--because it does work on many levels. Thank you very much for sharing this, --Matt Give what you have. To someone, it may be better than you dare to think. |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
YES! This has many facets to view. A 'diamond in the rough' shall always hold as much fascination for me as the most brilliantly polished stone. Nice work, a book offering for sure. |
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ThisDiamond Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353Michigan, USA |
Smiling...as I know this story so well... Excellent piece. ThisDiamond |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
Deep and shining. It has my vote. Kethry Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind. Unknown |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
Great work... Reflections:=> "Mirror Finish" ?  Regards, sudhir |
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Munda Member Elite
since 1999-10-08
Posts 3544The Hague, The Netherlands |
Really enjoyed. Well done! |
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regards2you Member Elite
since 2002-10-01
Posts 3940California |
Dave, So very well written. Imagery terrific. As with all of your poetry, enjoyed greatly. Hugs, Pat ..without surrender, be on good terms with all persons.. |
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KoKo Senior Member
since 2003-02-15
Posts 995Inside the shadow's shadow |
Very much enjoyed I do not know whether I was then a man dreaming I was a butterfly, or whether I am now a butterfly dreaming I am a man. |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Much enjoyed...so very beautiful and thought provoking. ~Hugs~ ~ Trace my body with your words.. |
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Chanson Senior Member
since 2000-08-19
Posts 1559Up Creek w/Out Paddle |
You bring home the resistance to change in this compelling poem, D. Thank you, I've enjoyed the images. *s When you think you have heard it all, |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
The moral behind your story was very well thought out, and presented in style. You sure have my vote. |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
I love this poem and the thought you put into it, too...  "Love makes the world go around" |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
wonderful write! I love it! |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Sometimes I feel so old and 'worn smooth'..maybe I should think of myself as a precious gem? I enjoyed this.  |
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D.Lester Young Senior Member
since 2001-12-08
Posts 1219Austin, Tx |
In all my tears, your words mirror into me in the humility that maybe my words will shine through in their rough appearance. |
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aries_luv_ppl Senior Member
since 2001-09-20
Posts 1448Universal Mind |
nice ~Every girl has a dream within. |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
I love your writings, and the thoughts you put at the end |
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Phantom Poet Member
since 2003-03-03
Posts 116Arizona USA |
nice write >>phantom poet<< |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
A wonderful and thought provoking piece. Well done. |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
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WhiteRose Member Elite
since 2002-07-23
Posts 3208somebody's dungeon |
An excellent write, enjoyed the read. |
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Alicethruglass Member
since 2001-06-19
Posts 368 |
I understand the mirrored look..and also your thought at the end was so truthful. ~A~ |
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