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The Star
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KoKo Senior Member
since 2003-02-15
Posts 995Inside the shadow's shadow |
The star twinkles, shivers, winks Down upon me in such a way- A way that makes me think It died for just a moment, right in front of my eyes Something that happens to us In every one of our lives. We die for just one second (You can trust the one who said it) When emotion reaches its highest (Yet perhaps I could be biased) The explosion is too great For our bodies to debate: Are they reborn or do they die, Do they laugh or do they cry? And so for just one moment we, (As do the air, the moon, the sea) Twinkle, shiver and wink And for a moment we don't think Of yester and morrow thoughts That make us selfish and distraught. In an instant we greet death And awake on Baby's Breath. |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Welcome to Passions, KoKo! I think you're going to like it here. Please, check your E-mail for a Special Greeting! Karilea |
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KoKo Senior Member
since 2003-02-15
Posts 995Inside the shadow's shadow |
I agree  I think I'm going to like it here, too! Thank you for the card!! I felt all special with my poem on its own card, lol. Thank you much for the warm welcome! It's great to see a friendly message for me And forget not that the earth delights to feel your bare feet and the winds long to play with your hair. -Kahlil Gibran |
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Robert Frazier Senior Member
since 2003-02-06
Posts 1014 |
KoKo, What a beautiful start! Love poems are a staple here...you should feel right at home! Rf |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
I enjoyed reading this. Margherita |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
nice writing! I enjoyed reading! Welcome! |
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Sunnyone Member Ascendant
since 2000-07-06
Posts 5334Staffordshire, England |
Hi Koko! I would like to add my hearty welcome to that of the family here. I loved this great work, by the way, and hope to see many more by you!!!  Accept these small gifts from my gypsy soul, and let the magik happen! ~~S~~ |
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the_loner_23 Member Ascendant
since 2002-06-08
Posts 5479Jacksonville, Florida, USA |
This is beautiful Cold hands means a warm heart |
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sellout007 Member
since 2003-02-14
Posts 108Suburbs of Chicago, IL |
Way to come with a bang! Great first post! A dream is but a dream, you can wake up. Reality is ultimate, and those who share it with us are far more important than anything we could remember, |
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Dragon Mistress Member
since 2002-08-26
Posts 289Washington, USA. |
Very good Koko. Much liked. Tanya ~*~I'm only a dreamer, with broken dreams, and only words to fall back on~*~ |
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KoKo Senior Member
since 2003-02-15
Posts 995Inside the shadow's shadow |
Wow...Thanks much guys! You really are way too kind!! And forget not that the earth delights to feel your bare feet and the winds long to play with your hair. -Kahlil Gibran |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
 Wonderful First Post KoKo! I look forward to seeing more of your work! ~Smiles & Hugs, Nancy~ |
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garysgirl  
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
KoKo, I really enjoyed your first post. By the way, I'm one of the "hopeless romantics" here, so I will certainly be looking for more of your poetry.. . . Welcome to our family of friends here at PIP. I hope you like it here. . .  . . Ethel....garysgirl  |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
  (smiles) Yay!!! Oh Lauren, I especially love the ending of the gorgeous poem, I love babys breath and long so much to hold my love close and feel her heaven close to my heart, this is a beautiful debut, I love it! Welcome to Passions, sweet Lauren, may you be inspired by all of us here as we will all be inspired by your lovely words! I can't wait to read more of your lovely words, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Lauren, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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KoKo Senior Member
since 2003-02-15
Posts 995Inside the shadow's shadow |
Thank you so, so much all!! You are all the greatest bunch of people!!!! Thank you all for making me feel so welcome and for your wonderfully kind words! I have taken a quick and very positive liking to this place and all of its wonderful people. You guys really are like a big family- it's extremely touching! Thanks again, everyone!!!!!!! I do not know whether I was then a man dreaming I was a butterfly, or whether I am now a butterfly dreaming I am a man. |
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Connel
since 2002-11-04
Posts 736Florida, USA |
Good poem. Enjoyed the read.. And im voting for it. =) I wish to become a great poet some day, but it will only come in time. Til then, I shall write my poems, and wait. |
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majnu
since 2002-10-13
Posts 1088SF Bay Area |
Now this is what they call a smashing debut! Simply wonderful, I hope to read more of your work. -majnu |
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KoKo Senior Member
since 2003-02-15
Posts 995Inside the shadow's shadow |
Thank you!!  !I do not know whether I was then a man dreaming I was a butterfly, or whether I am now a butterfly dreaming I am a man. |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
I missed this, the first time around -- my loss. I like the way you sing, and I'll look forward to seeing more of your work. ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> |
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KoKo Senior Member
since 2003-02-15
Posts 995Inside the shadow's shadow |
Thank you, Ratleader I do not know whether I was then a man dreaming I was a butterfly, or whether I am now a butterfly dreaming I am a man. |
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Lost Dreamer Member Elite
since 1999-06-20
Posts 2464Somewhere near the Rainbow |
Wow, this is fabulous, welcome to Passions.  Sometimes we have to follow a stronger voice, even if it's silent. |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Enjoyed...James |
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Albert J. Allie Senior Member
since 2003-02-13
Posts 512Queens NY |
 As usual..... |
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KoKo Senior Member
since 2003-02-15
Posts 995Inside the shadow's shadow |
Thank you Lost, James, and Albert for taking the time to read this and comment on it!!! I do not know whether I was then a man dreaming I was a butterfly, or whether I am now a butterfly dreaming I am a man. |
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carol Senior Member
since 2003-01-25
Posts 624Florida USA |
KoKo,this is really good I love looking at the stars Real friends celebrate in who we are and have faith in all that we can become |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
wow! |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
Lauren: this is just stunning! good luck! xxoo |
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KoKo Senior Member
since 2003-02-15
Posts 995Inside the shadow's shadow |
littlewing: Wow! The second time someone called my work stunning!!! I am SO flattered!!! Thank you VERY much, sweety!!!! I do not know whether I was then a man dreaming I was a butterfly, or whether I am now a butterfly dreaming I am a man. |
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