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morefiah
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since 2003-03-26
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Spanish Town, Jamaica

0 posted 2003-04-11 02:27 PM


You were there,
I saw you there;
Hiding somewhere in the shadows
of my shattered soul;
Secretly looking on
as my life disintegrated.
Life goes on,
and I have picked up the pieces,
but every now and then,
I remember seeing you there.

You were there,
I felt you there;
Smugly gloating at my pain,
while I was shrouded
in the darkness
of an emotional holocaust.
The scars have healed;
The pain is gone,
but even in my sleep,
I dream of feeling you there.

You were there,
I heard you there;
Quietly laughing while I wept.
Jeering, mocking
as I lay adrift
on a sea of my own tears.
The crying stopped long ago
and I can live again.
But sometimes in my busy day,
I suddenly hear you there.

You were there,
yes you were there;
Revelling in my devastation;
Cheering on the demons
that ravaged my broken dreams.
And even so I triumphed!
I saw you, felt you,
heard you there,
and still I triumphed,
though you were there.

Garfield

© Copyright 2003 Garfield Harvey - All Rights Reserved
Seymour Tabin
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since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720
Tamarac Fla
1 posted 2003-04-11 02:52 PM


morefiah
A strong write to say the least. Enjoyed  

Musicmaker1969
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2 posted 2003-04-11 03:11 PM


A very powerful poem.  Very dark in its mood.

Jesus lives in my heart!
sheriliegh@reddens.ca

KoKo
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since 2003-02-15
Posts 995
Inside the shadow's shadow
3 posted 2003-04-11 03:12 PM


I really did love this so much...it strikes a pain in my heart, deep and aching. I know how this feels and you've captured it well. Great write, and I agree with Seymour and Musicmaker1969
..Very powerful and strong

I do not know whether I was then a man dreaming I was a butterfly, or whether I am now a butterfly dreaming I am a man.
--Chang Tzu

[This message has been edited by KoKo (04-11-2003 03:13 PM).]

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