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My Bricks
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My Bricks |
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lost_star Member
since 2003-03-15
Posts 114NY, U.S.A |
I built a brick wall around me, So no one could get to close, I couldn't risk getting hurt again, I was just to fragile inside. I built it wide, I built it thick, I built it tall, I built it strong. I felt safe inside my walls. I felt okay. But then you came. You hit my walls but you didn't walk away, One by one you took down the bricks, You exposed my scared inner child, And you didn't laugh. THANK YOU! |
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Marshalzu  
since 2001-02-15
Posts 2681Lurking |
Wonderfully written, the last line was unexpected and really made this peice stand out from a lot of similar stuff. Great work.  |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
lost: felt safe inside my walls. I felt okay. But then you came. You got it - amazing lines here xxoo but then you came . . . . |
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Paul Wilson
since 2002-07-07
Posts 4711United States |
lost star~ I enjoyed very much. Thanks for sharing...Paul "To share my poems with you is to share my heart with you" |
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KoKo Senior Member
since 2003-02-15
Posts 995Inside the shadow's shadow |
Man I LOVE this!!!!! I know exactly how this feels and have to thank you for sharing this!!! Awesome write. I do not know whether I was then a man dreaming I was a butterfly, or whether I am now a butterfly dreaming I am a man. |
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