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Dreams Untold
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Dreams Untold |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia 
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My will is weak and dreams untold have led me to this hallowed fold, to this dream where time stands still and I bow down before your will Your will is strong and standing near those clouded words impale my ear, I have no sense of what's to come but stay until my world's undone Within the strands of time I wait passive, still - to meet my fate your breath exhales as I breathe in and I, with you, hold skin to skin This dreaming scape where clouds run free to cover up the depth of me and hold to all in hallowed haze where dreams escape to fill my days so quiet, still - with will that's weak I look to you for all I seek, no dreams of hope are mine just now and so I stand with furrowed brow Remembering the times gone past with wealth of dreams on call at last my world now emptied to all this revelling in my lover's kiss To lose myself within your dreams becomes naught more than flowing streams reflecting only thoughts of you, as tied to dreams, I follow through Emptying all there is of me and using dreams to set me free; holding still in time of bliss I'm held by dreams of deep abyss To wake and find in truth of dawn, my loss is great, for you are gone. Of love and hope I'm now bereft so dream me deep in lover's cleft, till dawn no longer holds its sway and I am held by dreams all day Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind. Unknown |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
"To lose myself within your dreams becomes naught more than flowing streams reflecting only thoughts of you, as tied to dreams, I follow through" WOW! I love the way your words flow, begging the reader to follow the stream. |
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NewEnglandlazurlu Member Rara Avis
since 2002-01-04
Posts 7470A Mountain Paradise |
Kethry, this was an outstanding poem. I enjoyed the words and the flow and the story. Huggles, Marti Few are those who see with their own eyes and feel with their own hearts. A.Einstein |
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theresa0847 New Member
since 2002-11-13
Posts 6 |
It's been a long time since i've actually read true poetry. I enjoyed this one very much. Thank you for sharing. |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
KethryKethryKethry~ My god, this is outstandingly lovely~ Girlfriend ... this IS POETRY~ 'stay until my world's undone' Oh yes ..... ~ Love ya' hooley dooley gal~  *Huglets* ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Kethry...I felt the honest passion in this beauty of your heart. |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
There are so many lines I find outstanding I could recopy your poem. *S* I especially like the closing couplet... but the whole flows so beautifully... great write! *S* |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Lynne I know when I see you're name upon these pages that Im in for a treat. This is a beautiful flowing write. love it! Maree  |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
You may post your fine poetry less often than I would like---but you sure make the wait worthwile with a poem such as this!  Huggums, EA |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
Midnitesun, thank you so much for reflecting back the flow. NewEnglandlazurlu, I am so glad you enjoyed the story theresa0847, thank you I don't know that this is true poetry, but I like it. Thank you for liking it too. Marge, when you like my work I know I must have hit an inspirational vein. Thank you for your good opinion, which I value above all else. Martie, coming from you, the queen of emotion, that is high praise indeed. Thanks for letting me know you liked this. suthern, when you respond to my work, you do so with such an open spirit I can't help but be amazed at your love. Thank you. Dark Angel, I hope I fulfilled the promise of a treat you were expecting. Thanks. Earth Angel, that you want to read more of my work is a compliment indeed. Thank you. To all my friends who persistently read and respond to my work in such a positive way thank you one and all. Kethry Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind. Unknown |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Kethry, this is one of the most beautiful poems I have ever read. It has a little sadness, but so much hopefulness, too. Hugs, Ethel |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
one of your best |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Very nice...James |
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Paul Wilson
since 2002-07-07
Posts 4711United States |
Kethry~ Your words echo saddness and comfort at the same time. I really enjoyed this poem. Thanks for sharing...Paul "To share my poems with you is to share my heart with you" |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
You're so good Kethry~ Could feel this down deep! |
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