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bsquirrel
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0 posted 2003-04-04 04:04 PM


It tucks into each glass,
waiting to be sipped.

A cool spot on the pillow
fills up with its ice.

It washes stones in the light late,
proving blue is colored snow.

We swallow, follow down,
swallowed by the sky.

All the trees are breathing
moonlight in their leaves.

Car lights paint a slant of wall
as they slide away.

We are left in quiet rooms
talking to ourselves

within measures paused and breathing,
slowly spreading towards the day.

Stella was a diver and she was always down.
Interpol

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littlewing
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1 posted 2003-04-04 04:26 PM


Mikey - I am beginning to understand you and quite frankly - it scares me (hehehe):

We swallow, follow down,
swallowed by the sky.

I too am one with the night . . . the moonlight - she is my companion . . . amazing writing here yet again . . .  I love this . . . xxoo

(and if you even come back with a diff interpretation - grrr . . . well then you have got me thinking still . . . and that is a good thing)

[This message has been edited by littlewing (04-04-2003 04:28 PM).]

Janet Marie
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2 posted 2003-04-04 05:39 PM


It washes stones in the light late,
proving blue is colored snow.
===========================
All the trees are breathing
moonlight in their leaves.
===========================
within measures paused and breathing,
slowly spreading towards the day.

===========================
"within measures paused and breathing,

I could come up with no lovelier or cooler define to describe whats its like to read your poerty...so I will use your own words to do you justice.

"and when we get to the pearly gates ...
we'll find what we called our sins were just mistakes."

Tom Kimmel


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3 posted 2003-04-04 09:19 PM


wow..
wranx
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4 posted 2003-04-05 12:32 PM


Got a "downtown hotelroom" feeling from this. Darkish and lonely.

And lovely

Damn, but you're writing well!

passing shadows
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5 posted 2003-04-05 02:42 AM


I always get a mood from your writings...I love it
Sudhir Iyer
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6 posted 2003-04-05 11:52 AM


great images... lovely write...

regards,
sudhir

Ceinwyn
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7 posted 2003-04-05 02:06 PM


*smiles and nods*

If at first you don't succeed destroy all the evidence that you tried.

Earth Angel
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8 posted 2003-04-05 03:31 PM


Mike, this line echoes through my being:

"All the trees are breathing moonlight in their leaves..."

I do not believe that I will ever be able to look at tree bathed in moonlight, without thinking of you!

You, Dear One, are indeed a POET!

Love & Moonlight,
Linda

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9 posted 2003-04-05 05:49 PM


enjoyed
Startime55
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10 posted 2003-04-05 06:37 PM


I sorta floated through this one. Very well put...I like the feel of it.
bsquirrel
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11 posted 2003-04-06 05:40 PM


Thanks.
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12 posted 2003-04-07 06:18 AM


nice imagery
as the night falls upon us

. . . all that we see is but a dream within a dream  . . .

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13 posted 2003-04-07 06:27 AM


love the poem it's awesome hehe night prowlers wooohooo!! hehe omg that pic of you is just to funny!!!
robin

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14 posted 2003-04-08 12:16 PM


We are left in quiet rooms
talking to ourselves

within measures paused and breathing,
slowly spreading towards the day.

pondering, and amazing

Lauren~

Through the darkness
I can see your light
And you will always shine
And I can feel your heart in mine

I will remember you

brian sites
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15 posted 2003-04-08 03:30 AM


this is pure
languor-age

you are a true poet
damn amazing Mike
and I echo all the above replies

you stun us
we are witness to talent

bsquirrel
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16 posted 2003-04-08 12:42 PM



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