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War Intermission
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War Intermission |
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ecrivan Member Elite
since 2001-12-10
Posts 3923my own state 
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Seems there is only so much room before telescopic lenses focus in zoom On the the life of war intermissions on extent of purpose and moral missions antenna pick up news of another offensive all for the benefit of mankind's defensive take on alternatives at halting predictive fear on its own turf...for this is the era of the chemical and biological not quite what was considered logical back when war meant confrontation of visible forces some have turned to other sources. When there is no respect for their own kind on home fronts, opinions changed some minds they would demonstrate in each major city war would still rage...a foregone pity rocket ships prepared for nightly launches enemy retreated on bitten haunches through atmospheric stages across belligerent mortared skies or headline topics on the fly seems aired news topics project just so far pressure behind dug trenches mounts a bar decayed parts...eminated stenches soldier's hand...a cross he clenches.... alternatives to avoid another stike? There is only so much room on the field before the doctor comes out to say, "Sorry can't see you too soon!" [This message has been edited by ecrivan (04-04-2003 12:47 AM).] |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
Martin - this is an excellent write here - many good points but this: soldier's hand...a cross he clenches.... Struck home . . . nice job xxoo |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Excellent write here Martin! Much enjoyed my Canadian friend. ~Hugs~ ~Somewhere in my heart I'm always |
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JP Senior Member
since 1999-05-25
Posts 1343Loomis, CA |
I liked it  Kind of a rap thing I think. not my usual faire but it was great. Yesterday is ash, tomorrow is smoke; only today does the fire burn. |
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ecrivan Member Elite
since 2001-12-10
Posts 3923my own state |
little wing, the clutching clenches heart strings..I guessed it would;0 Nancy, there are theatre pieces being written on all this now  JP, It has something of a rap protest poem to it difficult in keeping the lines light enough so that the reader doesn't get bogged down too much..thanks for sharing [This message has been edited by ecrivan (04-04-2003 12:48 AM).] |
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