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Riding With Angels
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass 
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Riding With Angels I work with him some days; a boy a year or two ago and now a man, but young enough to be a son. The proof of this: On these, the street days, he will bring his girl along. She's with him here today, an angel in a white tee shirt; She must be that, who but an angel would be riding in a truck for this, two men out pulling manholes, dropping probes and loading data. Angel, or a girl in love, the difference meaningless, and riding with him now. She's writing notes today, maybe a course she's taking, and I think she'll be a nurse; She has the eyes for it. A little shy with me of course, and though she never watches him, her nurse's eyes know where he is. One thing she doesn't know: that when he's working near, fetching the probes, perhaps downloading in the cab, one hand, her left, strays up to touch her hair. Does she or else the hand recall his touch, some private moment, stray caress along her cheek, and call it back? I hope it's so. I know that gesture well, because I've seen it too. My truck is empty now but there were times, back in the years when I was blessed by this; the times an angel rode with me. [This message has been edited by Ratleader (04-03-2003 03:23 PM).] |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Ed...there are many angels around...not all are lucky enough to recognize them. This is a lovely story.  |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Well, I must confess, I became somewhat perplexed as I read this. I do not believe that he and I have ever met, even though I am a nurse, an "angel" and as I write this reply, I am wearing a white T-shirt!  Love & Light, EA |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
EA -- and your eyes? I bet they have a certain look. I asked Rich today, and sure enough, a nurse. Martie -- I do think I'd know -- this happened yesterday, and my truck was definitely empty...no angels for me... Back for an edit so soon...Of course I'm going to give her this next time I see her...that'll get me either punched, slapped or hugged....worth the gamble, I think... ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> ______________Ratleader______________ [This message has been edited by Ratleader (04-02-2003 10:44 PM).] |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
Ed - this is lovely - as I adore angels as well - touched me this one did (hehehe I am a nurse too) She has the eyes for it. I know exactly what you mean . . . xxoo [This message has been edited by littlewing (04-03-2003 02:37 PM).] |
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Seraphine_CoB Junior Member
since 2003-04-02
Posts 14LONDON, UK |
the angellic title drew me, i have this strange obsession with all things angellic! i really do like the content however- i've read it twice now, nurses eyes is such a meaty and explainatory metaphor love Sephie xxxxxxx |
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GG Member Elite
since 2002-12-03
Posts 3532Lost in thought |
this is sweet.. I'd say someone wasn't focusing on work though  I was always told I should be a nurse (until I passed out from that book "where the red fern grows" when that kid was killed, and threw up all over my desk and the teacher had to quit reading it). But this just makes me smile as this saturday I leave to see my boyfriend of 11 months, it'll be the first time .. I can see his eyes  ok ok so I'm on a cloud, but its a real one! yay!Always, Alyssa - And so it was that time stood still - |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Ed....sure would like to see this as a book submission... you wrote this as if you had been but a spirit, yourself... watching... e-mail me if you decide to submit this - I'll be back to vote! |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Ed~ 'Does she or else the hand recall his touch, some private moment, stray caress along her cheek, and call it back? I hope it's so. I know that gesture well, because I've seen it too. My truck is empty now but there were times, back in the years when I was blessed by this; the times an angel rode with me.' What a vision to behold~  Definitely 'worth the gamble'~ *Huglets* ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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wranx Member Elite
since 2002-06-07
Posts 3689Moved from a shack to a barn |
A very, very good write and read Ed. |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
This is fantastic and I have to agree with Sunshine.. THIS should be in the book! ~Smiles & Hugs, Nancy~ ~Somewhere in my heart I'm always |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
touching... *s M |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Ed, this is so sweet and tender. I could see the whole scene as I was reading. You know, it really should be in the book. Let us know, okay? Hugs, Ethel |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
very touching, love the ending |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Ed...when I read your words, I am transported from this dull dining room into whatever story you are telling at the time, there's much to be said for that. As a nurse, I have to wonder what that look that nurses have in their eyes are though Perhaps the look of the devil at times...lol. |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
Naw, I've got two in the book already....no way a third would make it....but thanks for thinking of it! |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
one hand, her left, strays up to touch her hair. Does she or else the hand recall his touch, some private moment, stray caress along her cheek, and call it back? I hope it's so. I know that gesture well, because I've seen it too. My truck is empty now but there were times, back in the years when I was blessed by this; the times an angel rode with me. This touch of sad recall is the perfect ending for a wonderfully told story. *S* How is it that we don't miss things from our lives until we see others living the newness, the appreciation, the togetherness? *S* Excellent write! *S* |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
Longing...that is what this piece left me with...I want to be able to brush the hair from my face.... Susan |
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