for my younger brother (rosepetals' challenge)

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kaile

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since 2000-02-06

Posts 5146
singapore

0 posted 2003-04-01 12:40 PM

I once lost you in a shopping centre
and I knew I would die
if any harm came to you
due to my stupidity.
And don't brush away your awkwardness
by suggesting that
I was afraid of mum's wrath

or how about the time
when you were down with dengue fever
and I cried shamelessly,
my quest to act manly macho forgotten?
you were the calm one
reassuring me that you would be fine
it was incredibly cool and grown-up behaviour,
granted that you probably didn't realise how fatal dengue fever could be

you have come into your own since then
and we no longer communicate these days

we are seen in this photo,
my arm around yours
as we blissfully took in
the surfers conquering the horizons,
which must have been difficult
since the sky and sea seemed to merge to one

on hindsight,
it could be the case
where we both intuitively knew
and just wanted to spend
some quality time together
watching our relationship losing momentum,
drifting off into wide nothingness

I don't care how I think or how you think
It was a glorious day. Period.

[This message has been edited by Sunshine (04-01-2003 02:40 PM).]

Jason Lyle
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since 2003-02-07

Posts 1438
With my darkling

1 posted 2003-04-01 01:27 AM

Don't know what the challenge was, but challenge well met, A tribute to a siblings love.
Jason

[This message has been edited by Jason Lyle (04-01-2003 01:27 AM).]

passing shadows
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since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
displaced

2 posted 2003-04-01 01:31 AM

WOW! LOVE this!

majnu

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since 2002-10-13

Posts 1088
SF Bay Area

3 posted 2003-04-01 01:43 AM

i loved this. i can really identify because I also had a little brother - and he also almost died. kawasaki's disease - some rare heart condition that effects < 10K children world wide, and he got it! Yeesh!

anyway your link formatt is wrong. it should look exactly like this, save for the extra brackets in bold:

<>img src="http://imagecache2.allposters.com/images/DIR/8404.jpg"<>

-majnu
--------------------------------------
Timid thoughts be not afraid. I am a Poet.

[This message has been edited by majnu (04-01-2003 01:45 AM).]

garysgirl

Member Laureate

since 2002-09-29

Posts 19237
Florida, USA

4 posted 2003-04-01 02:00 AM

Kaile, this is a beautiful poem and
very touching. You met the challenge
very well.

Hugs,
Ethel

regards2you
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since 2002-10-01

Posts 3940
California

5 posted 2003-04-01 10:37 AM

Kaile,

Still haven't looked to see what the challenge was, but it is quite obvious with this very precious poem. It speaks!

Hugs, Pat

..without surrender, be on good terms with all persons..
"Desiderata"

kaile

Member Ascendant

since 2000-02-06

Posts 5146
singapore

6 posted 2003-04-01 10:39 AM

thanks for all these reads...this musing reads very raw and is badly in need of some editing but the emotions just poured out onto the screen after i read the challenge (and fought against time to write since i had a class to attend)....so for the time being, i am going to leave this as it is...

thank you again..it means something to me...as this is real personal stuff...

kaile

Member Ascendant

since 2000-02-06

Posts 5146
singapore

7 posted 2003-04-01 10:42 AM

Pat, Rosepetals has posted three great pictures in the Challenges forum and the challenge is to let your mind and muse go and write something from these pictures....a cool source for inspiration and i'm going to read other people's responses now.....

Majnu, i tried to insert the inverted commas but the link didn't work...but thanks for your help anyway...a pity though that i am a computer idiot..

rosepetals25

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since 2000-05-31

Posts 3076
PA

8 posted 2003-04-01 02:18 PM

Kaile

I love this. Siblings have such an affect on us.. I'm really gonna have to call mine

As for the link.. just erase the spaces.. there is a space after the < and before the > just delete them and the picture should show up just fine

Tara

"in my field of paper flowers
and candy clouds of lullaby
i lie inside myself for hours
and watch my purple sky fly over me"
- Imaginary by Evanes

Sunshine

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Member Empyrean

since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

9 posted 2003-04-01 02:41 PM

Kaile, a delightful read. Period! I had to laugh at that...sometimes we siblings just need to have the last word.

CocoBaci
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since 2000-05-06

Posts 3043

10 posted 2003-04-01 09:38 PM

A very touching write Kaile...
My compliments2u on a challenge well met...
Smiles2uPoetFriend
*~coco~*

Midnitesun

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since 2001-05-18

Posts 28647
Gaia

11 posted 2003-04-01 10:36 PM

I'm keeping this one, of course!
What a wonderful way to say I care, no matter what.

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